All Comments on 'The Key to Night Ch. 02'

These chapters are really short could you make them any longer. Great start to a great read other wise. Looking forward to seeing where you go with this.

I'm in total agreement with denverjohn

... but MUCH better content wise. Please try to fill out your world a bit more with better descriptions (I have the same problum though).

Again, the plot is very interesting. You can go far with this. First, I think you need to do longer chapters even if it takes you more time to put them out. This took 2 minutes to read. I was left with too many questions. What war is going on? I think you should have told the story in detail of how Merrick turned her. You are good with details. Keep putting lots in to draw the reader in. You do put good descriptions in. Also, what was he really asking her to do? How can she say yes when she has no details. You could have used her asking what he wanted as a chance to explain what is going on between the hunters and vamps. Keep writing. You have lots of promise. It is a great start.