All Comments on 'The Kind of Man'

It was good for your first attempt, and the story itself is already begging for a sequel. Or not, depending on what you had planned.

I would recommend an editor to help you split up the story into more interesting paragraphs. Like I said, it was a good story, and I don't know how many people are like me, but long, run-on paragraphs tend to make me lose interest, fast. Other than that, your language was all right and the story was interesting.

Good luck in the future!

Not really, better than some tho.

You did not make an improvement over other writers, sorry. I quite reading about 3/4 of the first page. Boring! Too much of the same stuff. Oh, being an accountant for the Mafia, now that is pulling at straws to be different.

You have a long way to go to be an improvement over other writers.

Build up? You brag about "build up" and then give us three or four paragraphs?

Read some good writers like JoeDreamer, Bluedragonauthor or TX TALL TALES. Then you could change your name to BETTER THAN WHO.

Don't wanna be shitty, but, seriously, dude...