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by BlueMoon0

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PistolpackinpetePistolpackinpetealmost 13 years ago
Nice little flash....

...because of the twist. So now you're posted. They're gonna' want a story. Have fun.

kingleonidasskingleonidassalmost 13 years ago
Ok Where's the beef?

Nice start. Lets have some more

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Casual author, here for fun. Feedback welcome. In any story I write, how was the pacing? Build-up too slow? Ending too fast? Need more focus here, or less attention to detail there?