All Comments on 'The Last Day of Summer'

That was a good story .

Could have been a good story but lot of mistakes in it. How do you misspell cereal?

At least, read what your spell-check does to your story.

Very well written and emotional ending!

Slut and nothing else'No substance

you need to proofread your work, or get an editor to correct your word mistakes.

Sweet story and believable! Screw the readers who are worried about spelling mistakes. This is porn, not grammar school. Lets see your stories, haters. If you haven't written one but only judge, then F you! Thank you for the story!

yet realistic...

...?

It was an interesting read! Nice ending.

i loved it but one thing became obvious first couple paragraphs in, you need to find someone you can confide in and let them proof read your shit. that way a lot of the little shit that was so prevalent in your story, such as liked instead of licked and where instead of were I mean little shit that's easy to miss or in a few sentences you left words out. All in all id give you a 9/10 amazing story just needs proof reading

That was so beautiful :')

only a total hack listens to the fake rave reviews, a writer that cares listens to the complaints and uses a good editor BEFORE posting.

only an asshole gives a rave review to a poorly written story so don't listen to the assholes or you will be just like them.

Try a LW story that you think would be the best on in that category. I'm betting you can't write your name!! Gave this a 5 to help the score.

I do like the story, and I know it shouldn't bother me this much, but there was a lot of spelling mistakes and I almost stopped reading after he said a bowl of "serial" GODDAMMIT

NO amount of money would convince me to fuck that skank whore! she has or has had every disease in the book and some that ain't in the book yet!

Should not have made the sister a skank.

Babe, the story is good but damn do you even know what grammar is?

I have to say this is a great story with the sister's love for her brother and how they get together and the sad ending makes me wonder if the sister cries on the first day of fall and I would really like to read a sequel to this story

P.s. Great title of the story "the last day of summer" and the story in the end almost made me tear up

This story was amazing. Yes, I agree with other commenting occupants that the grammar was indeed a little lax, but the story was incredible. Sexually appealing yet emotional at the end, it was almost poetic. You deserve a medal,man award for this. It basically describes the sadness of a memory passing in life, explained through summer flings. Bravo.

to an unlikely ending.The way it is worded it sounds like the sister left the college in October, as the seasons changed, and college begins as early as August, or the beginning of September. The author also left out any reference to the young man's future situation. If it is now October, did he get into a college or not? We know he got laid, but does he have a future? I know this story doesn't.

I quite like the story, but some of the comments are hilarious. OK, so the English is not first rate, but neither is it in most of the comments complaining about the grammar and spelling. Glass houses and stones?