All Comments on 'The Last Demigod Ch. 01'

A few typos, but otherwise a nice start. Please continue.

This has promise, please continue.

I enjoyed the first chapter, but the beginning doesn't make a whole lot of sense for why I should care about these characters. There's a little bit of description about Artemis and the main character, then it jumps to the fall of Olympus and suddenly he's on an adventure. I feel like there's some description or backstory that I'm missing. Something that I should care about, but was never given. I like the overall story, but the beginning could use some work.

Vagueness works as a story telling element when the reader slowly discovers the overall plot, but with this, we're given the whole outline of the major plot up front from characters that we know nothing about and have no emotional investment in. Keep up the writing though. I'm interested in where this is going.