All Comments on 'The Last Straw'

Great first effort in the Romance category! Keep writing I love your stories!

You've done a nice job focusing on the feeling of this character. It made the story much more interesting.

She is my favourite author!

NOPE she should have divorced first. NOW SHE WILL CHEAT AGAIN on any man that has her...

How is she going to feel tomorrow when she finds a note asking her to call the police.

When they say " A man was run over after slipping in that downpour last night. We think that he was knocked out because witnesses say he just lay still in the road. He was wearing dark clothing and the flowers he was holding were under him.

We are sorry but the driver of the truck that ran over him had no way to stop in time.

We can take you to the hospital but he was unconcious and we have not been informed of any change in his condition.

Do you need help to get to the hospital?"

Very sensual, more telling than showing. But a compelling story nun the less.