All Comments on 'The Librarian Ch. 03'

Thanks Michele, I'm totally loving this.

Caught up!

Well, Sarah and Tina, huh? I don't know what Randy thinks Sarah is going to do when she gets a part in the next production, but it isn't Mary Poppins. He's not in the line of fire, she is, or will be.

Great so far and I'm expecting it to get better.

Your truly,

Santacruzman

Exciting onto chapter 4

After three chapters it’s still a very good story and maintains the interest because it is a proper story. You don’t introduce sex until five pages in and, contrary to some stories, the sex is an integral part of the story because it’s there for a reason.

The bad news. An abundance of unnecessary semi-colons; still a problem with dialogue tags; dependent and independent clauses; grammatical errors. But nothing wrong with the plot or the story telling. Do the mistakes spoil the enjoyment of reading the story? Not for me and, looking at the scores, obviously not for the majority.