by mabinogionx
I enjoyed your story, good things happen to those who are used by unloving people, am I sorry for the stepmother? hell no, the bitch deserved what happened to her for her sadistic torture of M.It was fitting that Lisa and M found each other. Pity that Melissa and the rest of the others didn't get some sort of payback as well.
Im soo happy it had a good ending last 4/5 stories were depressing as crap, altho sad about the dad he had a happy ending
This should have an alternate ending where his stepmother dies latter and he has to do steadily more humiliating things like the cum jar.
I read to the end of page 4. By then I was done. It got old, fast. The events were predictable and there was nothing satisfying about any of it. It needs to be cut much shorter and changed up so the reader has some interest in learning what the ending might be. There's nothing driving me to find out cause that extra space I give a story to see if it improves has run out. Sorry dude or dudette, I've never written a post like this before. The story needs work.
a little long but worth it. im glad i stuck with it because it ended really well and it was refreshingly different. keep up the good work.
All that shit because he didn't want his Dad to know he jerked off.
Unbelievable.