All Comments on 'The Line Never Crossed'

that was very well written, most enthralling and a real pleasure to read, i hope Celeste shares more of her "fantasies" ;)

It was very good

But leaves me wondering where the snake head was during this?

Perhaps you might want to remember the words "On my sex" a simple way of talking about the mommy parts.

I did like it though.

And I know how much you thought on writing this.

Erotica at its best. Dark, sensual, intoxicating...I can't wait to read more.

What a great way to mix horror and erotica!

The character's were intense... I hope to read more about them!

Your writing shows a vivid imagination, or perhaps you have read one too many Anne Rice novels. The text show signs of having been written on the fly, with a poor editor/proofer. For online erotica, it is passable. As for someone who aspires to be a published author, I would have been a little more careful about what work of mine I put out there. I also agree with the person you mention who says you need to learn a lesson in subtlety. A little restraint can go a long way towards enhancing the mood.

Lon

I read this story a couple of days ago, and it's one of my favorites.

Which is why I don't understand some of the comments that have been posted...

It's amazes me how people want "subtle" erotica.

And that other poster obviously had some personal beef with the author, so I tend to take anything s/he said with a grain of salt...

I do like how the writer was compared to Anne Rice. I hope Ms. Pinto finds as much success as Ms. Rice has.

thats hot.

like seriously

i'd like to have a little more cutting and blood sucking involved, with a little mroe pain. but other wise awsome

I ran across this looking at random stories on my phone, and I felt compelled to search it out on the computer just so I could comment and tell you what a fantastic piece of literature this is! Arousing as hell, very well written, and it truly holds the audience in the scene. Excellent job!