All Comments on 'The Liquids Rule Ch. 02'

You are a gifted story teller. I like how you describe the thought process of your characters. I appreciate the inside view into the girl's mind, and the stark difference between her abuser's mind. Only thing I would consider changing is the category. Maybe exhibitionist/voyeur would be more suitable for this chapter. Perhaps other members can chime in on that. Regardless, it is very good writing.

Sexy story