All Comments on 'The Lonely Salesman Ch. 02'

Great job with writing from a womans point of view. I loved it

and so romantic and tender - wish I was him and could meet someone like Connie. That's what fantasy is all about. Just one criticism and that is the overuse of the word BABY - makes them sound like school kids instead of 30 year olds - it was used far too frequently and I found it very annoying.

the length of time they have known each other, how little they know about each other, and the speed with which they forgot about the rest of the world. and yes the language (baby, baby, baby,) was out of character for mature, professional, adults.

Chapter 2 in this lovely romantic drama doesn't disappoint, as the story continues to unfold. It is true that the grammar could be a little better, and it is true that the word "baby" is overused, but the story overall is so wall done that it still gets 5 stars. Beautifully written from start to finish.