by andhravadoo
I don't know if I agree with the previous comment but, I can somewhat understand their comment to a degree.
This started out very interesting but it went in a very wild direction pretty quickly. I kind of lost interest half way through then, I made it to the end and didn't understand what you were trying to do.
It was written frenetically and I found it a little hard to follow at times. I think all the themes you were trying to incorporate is what through it off in my opinion.
I'm not a fan of the masculine sort of futanari as well so, I'd take a lot of my criticisms with a grain of salt.