All Comments on 'The Luckiest Guy in the World Ch. 02'

you have me waiting anxiously for the next chapter!

Not surprising..

- Disgusting, small and "anus loving" deviants.

When you wrote about Arnold selecting "slut" as he drifted off, you attributed it to Terminator. You were actually referring to a scene in the original Total Recall.

My personal jury is still out on your Luckiest Guy series. Not quite 5 star material, in my opinion, but I have definitely read worse. I'll reserve judgement when I see where the next installment takes us.

You are right, SomethingintheWays, it was Total Recall. Thanks for pointing that out.

Hey dude I think you could teach "erotic story engineering" at a great university!

Keep writing!!!

You had sex with your home? Yes, I meant HOME because that is what you wrote. Did you even read it before submitting?

Harsh, Anonymous, harsh. But I can't argue with a typo. Sure, I read it lots of times, but you know how it is: you *think* you're reading the words, but you are actually "reading" what you expect to see. So I missed that. I will see, however, about fixing it.

I think we have a new steady "elite" contributor in the genre, which we're sorely missing here.

Thanks for posting this continuation. I'm anxious to read the next part!

Very well written, thank you!

but then dribbly-dicked serial-strokers with room-temperature IQ's like ekime22 will love it; but "a new elite contributor?" Oh please, don't make me laugh any more than I already did, and don't go preening because a horny retard praises you; this story was mildly well done, but you really need to learn how to write properly; a story classically goes like this: exposition, rising action, climax, falling action and conclusion, Expository Writing 101, but I doubt you were there; and while we're on the subject, get someone else to proof-read you, not you, and not some fawning sycophantic ass-licker, get someone who doesn't give a shit about the subject, maybe they'll teach you some lessons about correct use of the language. No stars, check out how to describe the real world before you go inventing fantasy ones.

I sure like it when I receive positive comments on my stories, and having published ten books that have sold hundreds of thousands of copies, I am pretty sure that I can write reasonably well. But you are of course free to say whatever you'd like about this story.

What I don't understand is: why you are so angry?

So you couldn't get off on my story. No biggie.

Just move on to another, and try not to ruin everyone else's fun along the way.

I'm a daily reader of Literotica, but rarely comment. I loved your story and style of writing. Thanks for making it available and I look forward to the next installment.

I simply loved this story. It was different. I thought the Janny scene was well done. To your critics and their anger at mistakes, "water off a duck's back".

Thanks Don

I didn't like the use of "Molly". I think a bit more patience may have done it- on the other hand, it helped trigger an "episode" that may bring some long deserved closure to Janice. I'd like more chapters without the pharmaceutical manipulation...let his latest software do the work...the story premise is very hot....

LeFrog08, I know what you mean. I had/have some concerns about it, too, but it will only be a part of the process, certainly not the determining factor. Hopefully you will not find it too much of a "cheat". I was originally going to just use the software to gradually draw her in, but that has its own drawbacks, including story characters that are "stuck" behind the VR glasses. Well, you'll just have to let me know how I did.

Really liked it so far, waiting for the next chapter. The VR stuff is a good twist.

It stops with a great Cliff Hanger and I hope you revisit the story for more chapters and filling out the characters. I feel like we're about a third of the way through a great story. The characters are all in place now we just need to see them and their situations evolve to a fulfilling ending. Finish it and you could be selling it on Amazon.

This is such a well written story. I can't wait until the next chapter. Luckily you seem to be putting them out fairly quickly. Thanks..

First two chapters really had me looking forward to more....Chapter 3???

It's pretty close to being done. Sorry, been busy starting a new job....

different from most around here. Original take on mom-son sex with the VR scenario.

DIDN"T like the use of drugs in the "Janny" scene. just strikes me as WRONG.

I know in the story he says he's NOT a nice guy. I agree. He's NOT a nice guy. Anyone who uses drugs to obtain sex is NOT a nice guy.

I'll be interested to see where this story goes in the next chapters.

I guess we want to empathize with, pretend to be, the guy who's getting his mom. So when he is kind of nasty that's harder to do.....

Son does not care about anyone but himself. He is a god reason for abortion. He is the luckiest guy in the world because he is still lives.