All Comments on 'The Lusty Rendezvous'

Makes the story readable-Which I didn't

I liked the story but found the long paragraphs hard to read on a computer screen. Just seemed so intense, many times I have viewed and left stories before reading them, just because of the long paragraphs.

Otherwise Well done on your first story

I liked that the story was so intense. I like good relentless sex scenes. But think about newspaper writing when writing for online. Even long paragraphs shouldn't be more than five or six sentences max.