All Comments on 'The Man of My Life'

This was one of the worst stories I've ever read. Do something about your English or NEVER write again.

Thank you.

I am usually not very critical, however is English your first language. The story is so disjointed with all the errors I suspect in the intended words and grammar which I am not all that good at. Words like what I assume was to be "such" when you were referring the the anger.. Sorry, it is interesting if you can follow it which I found hard to do with so many errors but at least you put an effort forward, which is more than I have done. I hope your writing improves, or if your language is not English as your first language consider asking someone to edit with you. You should have someone else read it and help you edit it even if English is your first language as this was so difficult to follow. Sorry for the negative feedback.