All Comments on 'The Master Serum Ch. 01'

T'was a nice start :)

excellent start to what should become good reading. big fan of sci-fi and mind control stories

This is the apocalypse. You are engaging in mind control. WHO defines what or what age is "legal"?

These are men who desire sexual subjugation and the sexual submission of every available female, why would "18" be the magic number? Why not 17? Or 16 or 12 or even younger? In the apocalypse, there is no legal age and especially if you believe in a mind control serum that would give 100% dominance over any female.

In other words dear author, you can't tell me that men who would abuse, dominate and mentally destroy would care about what age is legal. You think criminals care how old their victims are? You think drug dealers and pimps have a "legal age limit"? Fuck no.

So if you are concerned about what's legal, then it's only in the confines of the restriction of the website and if you can't be consistent in your story, then I'm not going to waste my precious time reading a story that pisses me off.

Thank you a ton for the support!

Thank you for your impassioned response. Your time is indeed precious, and I would agree that you should spend it elsewhere.

Nice story

I like the way You told Anon. to Shove It. I figure if you got a Complaint at least be willing to Say it and leave yourself open for Criticism. I Think Anon. should be turned off so People have to make up a Name if Nothing Else.

Looking forward to reading another one of your amazing stories.

I have read all of you're stories and I know I have read them in the past so I just wonder where they've come from did you have another account in the past?

Hmm... That's an interesting sensation for you to have had because I've never posted them anywhere before. Unless you've read my stories on Amazon then you wouldn't have seen them in the past.

Unless you have a superpower where you can read stories in the future. In which case I am quite envious because I would want to know what happens in the next Game of Thrones book!!!

I liked this story, i hope you make it a bit larger next time

Having read your other stories I'm confident this is also going to be a great story. My only complaint is to your promise of releasing "The Catch" in a few days when it has been a few months. Are you giving up on this story? I hope not.

You forced me to use my imagination in the story breaks. Fill in the blanks.

I still sense something different about stella, looking for the rest of the series.

Would love to get a sequel

Great start to your new Series. Looking forward to it. Thanx for the Read.

I love this story, please continue the series, I'd love to read what happens next.

@JCBeleren: What happened? You did NOT continue the story. In your Afterword you said it'd be "The Catch." I looked under your story submissions for a "The Catch," or perhaps "The Master Serum Ch. 2 The Catch." Did NOT see it. ??? - what happened.

definitely needs a follow-up

Too bad we don't get to read more as it seemed to have great potential. It is a very well thought out and written story. I definitely looked forward to reading more of your work, alas only one left I haven't read. I appreciate your and your Muse's imagination and abilities to bring it to your story. Thank you for sharing your vision and talents.