All Comments on 'The Missing Link and it's Yummy!'

While the story itself was good, you kept bouncing back and forth between present and past tense, sometimes even within the same sentence. It was very distracting and put somewhat of a damper on the overall enjoyment. Pick a tense and stick with it throughout the story. Your readers will greatly appreciate it.

would have loved to find a sissy like you in the arcades I visited