All Comments on 'The Mistake'

It's a good start to what seems like a good story please send the rest of it.

Good start... hoping for more.

Thank you, it's my first story ever, and the plan is that it will be very long, and ongoing. Part Two is almost done, and I hope to submit it in the next day or two.

the games begin....

I am looking forward to reading more about the adventures of Doug and Ginny. I'm guessing she's about to get a wild ride and it will be interesting.

That she is betraying a guy who loves her.. Maybe you could position this better if she was about to leave her everloving.. Would certainly make her more sympathetic?

A wonderful start. I am looking forward to chapter 2

Thanks! I submitted part 2 five days ago.....still pending. Hopefully they'll approve it soon.

Loving it! :D Thank you.

Score pending.