All Comments on 'The Most Painful Day with Mom'

The story idea was good and had a lot of potential but it was way too rushed! Also, before you go any further jump on the forums and find yourself an editor because English is obviously not your primary language and it made it almost impossible to read.

Im sorry, add the bad grammar along with the misuse of correct punctuation topped off by a katana under his mom's throat, please stop.

THIS NEEDS A LOT OF WORK. GRAMMAR, PUNCTUATION, CONTINUITY, JUST TO NAME THE MAIN PARTS. ALSO, YOU SEEMS TO HAVE TROUBLE TRANSLATING FROM YOUR NATIVE LANGUAGE INTO ENGLISH. GET HELP PLEASE

I thought is was a good first effort, a little short but good. The premise is an interesting one. I had no trouble reading the story, i noticed very little if any of what the Anons are whining about. Evidently they are english professors and instead of reading they like to tear down what they can't do. Ignore the haters and keep writing each effort you will get better and those haters will disappear. Looking forward to reading what comes next

The true feelings and desire come through. Many want to be forced to do something they want so they feel they are not responsible.

Keeping that in mind, I'll also keep this comment short and simple: Look up the word "horrible" in a dictionary. That's what this story was, from start to end.

Thats a nice way of putting it with so much bad grammur and poor word choicez . She clinged to him , CLUNG she CLUNG onto him. Just cause spill cheque says the spilling is write it isn't necessarily the write word.

I submitted something once and it got refused. I was told I needed an editor. I'm a guy who got A" in college English. And somehow this gets printed?

Love to see the men fuck her son and make the mom watch or even hold his ass cheeks open for them.Maybe they find a strap-on in her bedroom and make her put it on and fuck her sons ass.

Terrible grammar and spelling - guessing that probably English is your second language

Sorry, like the idea but it was written very bad. Missing words and weak story.

many times, and all were done better.

I've had stories rejected for accidentally omitting a comma in a line of dialogue in the middle of a paragraph, with a suggestion that I get an editor, and this garbage-encrusted anal leakage masquerading as a story is passed through like a stewed prune through a short granny; truly the world is going to shit...

I'm reluctant to give even one star, as it would validate this Helsinki nightmare hot-dog of a story by acknowledging its presence. A sad and sorry day for Literotica.

His opinion is worth less than nothing. He should be ignored.

Hello Guys,

As you may have noticed, Its my 1st submission and English isn't my main language. I mostly write in French. I'll try to be more careful with the grammar in part II.

Thanks

Rubbish don't bother writing anymore

Started good. What happened to the rest