All Comments on 'The Muse'

This is very very good. Light and cheerful. Hallmark could use this, expand it into a movie trilogy or a short run TV series ( do they still have those? It’s been several years since I’ve watched TV)

Above all I hop no pirates steal this.

A good read. Well developed plot and characters.

Excellent writing. Bravo!

Another one of your stories that belongs on a shelf instead of on this website, bravo

Thank you for this story and the others I've read so far.

It's helping me smile and laugh and brings happiness to my heart while waiting for the divorce papers to arrive.

Brilliant. San Antonio must be really nice to live in or visit. A different slant on the muse and a well constructed story it great rapport among Richard, Mary and Janice. Shame about Betty. But what a lovely way to end your story.

Love to read some new stories but understand why you wouldn't use Lit again.

Okay, so this story gets shifted from my 2nd reading to 3rd reading list. Why can’t I vote 3 times?

None of us are perfect, we've all got flaws. Some are endearing and others not so much so. The greatest things that we humans accomplish we do with love. We accept the imperfections of our loved ones and even find them endearing because of love. Nothing is insurmountable when we work together with love in our hearts.

*****

Another first class story.

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Another Top Shelf Story!

11/10 Purple Roses!!!!!

Another incredible story!

@DreamCloud … you take me to another place. Thank you

When will this become a movie? Please…

About the best I have ever read on this site!

What a brilliant piece of fiction - loved it! I suppose it’s too much to do an “Oliver “ and ask for “more please”!

Next chapter, please??!!! You just can't leave us hanging like this! Please??!!

Dreamcloud please come bavk this site really needs many more of your well crafted stories.

I've lost track of how often I've read this story.

Whenever I'm down it never fails to lifts me up.

Absolutely great, thanks

Yes, too bad this author felt compelled to leave us. Maybe? Hopefully? DreamCloud has been scooped up by a paying publisher. It anyone knows where we can read more of this author’s wonderful work, please, post it here!

I am a tough “audience”, as I am not a huge fan of Romance stories, but DreamCloud’s are among the best of any kind of stories here!

I love it. One of the few stories that made me laugh out loud.

Dennis

Oh my goodness, this was awesome…I loved it….

Thank you for sharing

Love it! I'm a romantic at heart, and this is one of the best. I have but one criticism, and I don't believ3 thr error is yours. 5his one * believe is on that damned spell check word predictor program. I hate that shit with a passion and hope the originator of it has never ending bleeding hemorrhoidsI Leave our words alone, Let us make our own mistakes!

On page four is a paragraph beginning "Richard and I ate breakfast at a small coffee bistro." Then after a couple of sentences we read this: "He was an ecliptic reader, dabbling in a bunch of genres."

The word in your mind I'm sure was "eclectic" and not "ecliptic." All it took was one little typo and spell check seized the moment with great glee, I'm sure. Like I said: Bleeding hemorrhoids. Perpetual and desevedy so.

I loved this story and your writing. If you've stopped publishing here because of plagiarists as one comment says, I hope the plagiarists are being hunted down and dealt with in the judicial equivalent of perpetual hemorrhoids. Thanks for another great story.

Loved this.

3 of the site's best love stories are by you.

It's too bad plagiarists have driven you from the site. You were one of the best.

Did Janice say 'take you to new directions?' I thought she said 'nude erections'... Come on, who can say no to that?! Truly, that women never seen to accept that they are as beautiful as we men see them. My wife was being critical of some imagined flaw and asked my 'honest opinion'. I walked over to her, frowning, "Well there are a few things, easily fixed. You're too far away, my hands aren't on you, and you're still wearing clothes." After a long kiss and body hug/caress, I conceded, "All right, if you insist, you can keep the clothes."

Anon56

About accepting our loved ones flaws, and loving them all the more for them. A beautiful concept if the world could be convinced to accept it.

excellent

Read it a 2nd time. Very fairy-talish but still a wonderful 5*.

Too bad that author has seemingly stopped writing. Some of his stories, such as The Promise and The Rehab are the best stories in Literotica.

Great story, people with anxiety disorders cope in various ways. A pet, a person (hopefully not treated as a pet), a “lucky” keychain or other item. Sometimes a period without the anxiety forms a run for a long time cure.

Decent story,is Melissa pregnant or was it to wind Janice up.?After all they are not married.

Not enough stars - I needed at least five more! Brilliantly conceived of and written. Thank you DreamCloud for a truly lovely love story.

OK, that did it! Another darn 5 for a story that sends me from confusion to ecstasy. DreamCloud just won't leave well enough alone. Ooooh I wish I had his talent ......

That was awesome.

Dude, your stories need to be made into movies...

this is fun : usually DC makes me cry, now he lets me laugh

thankx for sharing

Another five star read. What a pity this author has stopped writing for LW.

Loved it! Great job. Thanks!

That ending was brilliant

Beautiful, just beautiful! 😭

I have glad tidings for all of you DreamCloud fans. He is still writing, but on another site (Wattpad), using a different nom de plume (mdpotter55). He is currently writing an epic-length fantasy novel called “Unseen” that is nearing the end. Although his collection of stories on Lit are amazing, this latest work is my favorite. Give it a read! And while you’re at it, drop DreamCloud a note using direct feedback to express your appreciation for his works that he is giving away for free. That’s what I did, and that’s how I found out about his new writings. Enjoy!

Another great story from the master. I only wish that DreamCloud could be convinced to start writing again here on Lit as he has so much to give as an author. Well Done 5++Stars

Alright, I will be honest I was not sure if I was going to like this story. Now I have finished it, and I do not want it to end. Well done.

As a writer who suffers from anxiety disorder, the dream of finding my own 'Mary' ranks pretty damned high. I've read this story at least a dozen times, and in spite of the occasional awkward wording, it is a true masterpiece. We really lost a good one when DreamCloud went.

We have all been a little diminished losing one of our best writers.

Loved loved loved it!!!

Thanks for writting another great story

DreamCloud has some of the best stories. Another 5*.

Really enjoyed it. I was quite taken by the whole story and I am envious of your talent.

What did I think of this story? 'God's flower' comes to mind.

You have a very special talent. I've experienced in several of your stories, and all I can say is thank you! Thank you for sharing with us.

You allow us to feel the love, the passion, the pain, and so much more.

Be safe, stay healthy, and please, please, please, keep writing.

Awesome story.

Yes, it *can* happen.

Heck, JK Rowling stumbled across Harry Potter at a reading in Ireland...right down to the scar.

The only reason Mr. Radcliffe received the role was the boy was not the slightest bit interested in acting.

I really think this story is preposterous. No one is going to see a person and think oh man that's Sookie Stackhouse. That's Mercy Thompson. That's fucking Harry Potter.

The entire premise is dumb.

So many good Stories, but for me I have added it to my Top Three of your stories.

Again I will say if could easily be a Hallmark movie.

Hope you read our comments.

Patch

This is the third of your stories I have read, and they just keep getting better! As a writer who uses a pen name to maintain anonymity, I can say with absolute certainty that you hit the bullseye describing both Richard's anxiety and the calming power of a loved one. Well done!

What a great story ... I used to think I came to this site for the heat but soon realized it was for the love .. I guess I’m just a hopeless romantic.. I wished this story never ended ..you are a very talented writer .. thank you !

I loved it, particularly the humor in it. “I could smell the gossip brewing from where I stood “. God, what a great line. Five stars, and it deserves ten.

I'm late for work since I just sat here and read this from start to finish.

Thank you.

Nuff said!

not just a favorite story but my absolute favourite sorry on this site to date. So beautiful, so subtle. I can only hope that once day you will return to us and share your new musings with us. Please do. Thank you for sharing your talent.

Your stories are nothing short of awesome . The humor with inter dialogue sets you apart . Just fabulous story telling . Thank you!!!

Great story and thoroughly enjoyable characters. Would not mind reading more of them in the future (as long as happy endings continue).

Thoroughly enjoyable!

Sir, your works of art are brilliant!

Unlike some authors on this site, you do not repeat themes endlessly and your works are all the better for it.

It is a huge shame that this site will never see anymore fresh material from you.

Love your work!

I had just worked a 36 hour straight run and was so tired that I couldn't finish the story. However, I got up at 4.15 am to finish it and was not disappointed.

I really enjoyed it, good writing, lovely phrasing, love, wine, secrets, a happy ending & no pain loving bitches [except for Stacy & Betty who don't really count]. More please !

stories I've read in awhile. Of course all DreamCloud's stories are phenomenal. I've enjoyed every one I've read. Thanks!

sheer unadulterated fun.

I’ve never read a pot-boiler romance though I admit the covers are fun. I think you’ve out done them. Spot of advice. I’ve noticed you are beset with homonyms. Like “ecliptic reader.” Ecliptic describes the earth’s orbit. Eclectic means wide-ranging, inclusive. Just a thought, but you might want to consult a thesaurus on occasion.

Said it best. I so wish you were still writing DreamCloud . I have reread your stories so many times it probably borders on obsession. Thank you thank you thank you

That's all I have to say, beautiful . You really have a talent for writing. Many a day I am late for work wanting to finish a story or chapter.

Keep at it and hope you get published some day.

I hope you can sue the H**l out of the rotter & his publisher. Rant over. You are such a goood writer. As an 85 year old widower, living on SocSec, mostly my only enjoyment is reading Non-erotic and Romance on here. And you are one of the best. Thank you. The Muse had me laughing out loud. Please, when things get settled, write some more for me and your other (million) admirers. / Just J

I would like a second chapter where Mary gets pregnant and has the baby. and the baby grows up and other things. Like the Link.

second time around better than the first, I enjoyed it more, and so many possibilities for more. Thanks for your excellence, and hard work.

NorthPacific

Your writing skills never cease to amaze me! What a great story! A lot of interesting plot twists all revolving around romance. Great Job once again!

once again a"very good read"i hope you keep spittin em out.

hornyoldgoat6969

Another amazingly imaginative plot. Your stories are always so fresh.

And, no, the copy editing errors are minor and few.

Ecliptic reader on page four? Surely you meant eclectic reader!

And then on page six: what do you think I would like on TV? probably should be

What do you think I would look like on TV? or maybe

Why do you think I would like to be on TV? though my money is on option one.

Please don't feel bad about my comments. Just two in seven pages.... Tim431431 must be reading more attentively ;)

You should do a romantic story with firefighters. Just saying, Im a future firefighter, and I think a dramatic tragic story about about firefighter love would be amazing. But I love your stories. So amazing, all 5 stars

This one is right in the pocket. Not too hot, not too cold- just right. You take a theme and shake it by the ears until all the good stuff falls onto the screen. Happy writer; Happy reader.

This one was a 5 ,I mean, 10. Great job. Thank you

to ones advocation, TK U MLJ LV NV

First off, I love dreamcloud's fictional account of a fiction writer. Like a self-portrait in prose. Very well done. Also, and this is one of my best compliments, your story was so engaging that I can overlook your plethora of grammatical and vocabulary missteps. I know of many books I have paid for that I cannot say that about. I just had to get those out of the way.

Now, onto my comment based on my title. You could have made Richard much like the cantankerous anti-social asshat that Jack Nicholson played in "As Good as it Gets" but you chose to, instead, portray him as an endearingly shy man who loves wholely and is a man of character who deserves to win his Melissa. I applaud you for this. I have marked this story as one of my favorites and I know I will come back to it again and again.

Thank you for so generously sharing your talent and your heart with your words.

i feel this story is way weaker than anything other i have read from you. i have rated all your stories 5* so far but im going for 4 this time

i couldnt feel the characters this time and it felt more like a Sugar daddy story to me. still very well written though.

Loved it!!!!!

I found DreamCloud and started reading from the top. So far all the stories are great. The Muse, has lifted the bar. This was an exceptionally well written and empassioned story.

DoW

Any DreamCloud story is my favorite while I'm reading it, but this one is special. I'm in awe at how much The Muse consumed me. It's even better than the first time I read it. It's just perfection. This is my favorite story and I'll enjoy re-reading it over and over. Thank you DreamCloud

The title of my comment says it all.

A second read through for me. As an O.C.D., ex PR writer where fact and grammar is an absolute, I totally forgive all the silly typo errors. Why? Because real creative writing trumps grammar every time. It is always a shock, given the nature of this site, when you can read eloquent and empathic stories that have genuine heart-warming appeal. Thank you DreamCloud for all your contributions. Chapeau!!

You craft characters that are deep, complex, and believable. I'd like to know them in real life and each time I finish one on your stories I'm simultaneously glad for reading it and disappointed that it is over. Bravo!

I see these small writing imperfections and feel that if all the writers had proof readers and editor to make the stories perfect or near perfect, I suspect that we all would have shell out some cash in order to read. Please stop complaining as I do not want to have to use my visa to pay to read the stories that I select!

Baton Rouge Cajun.

I tell you before, you are my favorite author of Romance stories!

This story was great, lovely, and all the wonderful words can I imagine.

I love the story, and specially the end, is GREAT!

Please (I know is an old tale), keep in mind for write a sequel of this story.

The world need more writers like you. If they are, the world are better and happy.

5* for you, because I have not the possibility to give more.

I can`t wait to read more Romance stories from you.

Many thanks for your work and time.

You only need to find a good producer to enter to Hollywood by the great door!

I'm not going to lie: I love this story so much. I felt the emotional intensity deeply. And strangely enough, this piece of literature actually updated my list of: known acts and things that turn me on sexually". :))))

I have to think you share your talents elsewhere as well, where can we read you? This is a stone cold 5*

You have the ability to convey human emotion in a way that is very relatable by the reader. The theme of true love winning out is pervasive in your writings and it is a good one. We all believe that, or want to, except for the truly damaged.

I can go on and on but sir I look forward to your next post on Lit.

I have thoroughly enjoyed working through some of your stories over the past few days - all have been more than worthy of the 5 star ratings I've give them and this one is no exception.

There may well be odd typo's and grammar hiccups but honestly the stories are so compelling I skipped through them without missing a beat. Long may your writing continue.

Watch the use of your grammar. Past tense, present tense and future tense..othewise, the story was pretty good.🤓

Just got done reading the whole story...LOVED the ending! Janice is going to go mildly insane...

Word Processors are truly a wonderful boon to an aspiring Author .

and Predictive text can really speed up getting your thoughts and ideas onto the page without the worry of overthinking spelling errors .... Sadly sometimes this leads to wrong word selection and Free editing & Proof reading will sometimes fail to pick up on & correct the errors ....

Yes one can turn off the predictive text feature , & thus create a piece that will need much more time & effort by those Volunteer Editors & Proof readers ... which in my view is a big ask for a story that is being provided for Free

spelling mistake , combined with predictive text can and does lead to some crazy word selections ... although one would note that this Author only has the occasional blip or problem with it ..

And so , i would like to take the time to Congratulate the Author & volunteer editors/proof readers .. for a job well done

and for sharing with us here at Literotica some most wonderful Free stories

i truly Enjoy the tales DreamCloud has produced that so often have such damaged / emotionaly challenged people meeting and somehow finding happiness & a wonderful future ... blessed

5 stars

xxxTwistedOliverxxx

A good bit "Castle"ish but damn good!

You should revisit them!

He was an ecliptic reader, dabbling in a bunch of genres.

SHOULD BE:

He was an ECLECTIC reader, dabbling in a bunch of genres.

EXPLANATION:

The ecliptic is the apparent path of the Sun on the celestial sphere, and is the basis for the ecliptic coordinate system.

eclectic

adjective

1. selecting or choosing from various sources.

2. made up of what is selected from different sources.

3. not following any one system, as of philosophy, medicine, etc., but selecting and using what are considered the best elements of all systems.

4. noting or pertaining to works of architecture, decoration, landscaping, etc., produced by a certain person or during a certain period, that derive from a wide range of historic styles, the style in each instance often being chosen for its fancied appropriateness to local tradition, local geography, the purpose to be served, or the cultural background of the client.

noun

5. Also, eclecticist [ih-klek-tuh-sist] (Show IPA). a person who follows an eclectic method, as in philosophy or architecture.

I found one of your stories quite by accident. I've been a literotica reader for ages but somehow missed your work. Glad I ultimately found my way! I've been burning through them like vacationer pounding too many margaritas. No self control, no pacing, just shooting them back with wreckless abandon.

Thank you for giving my romantic heart such a feast! My cup runneth over!