All Comments on 'The Naughty Family Ch. 01'

I cant wait to read more about this naughty family!

The story has promise but needs some serious proof reading and editing to fix some flaws. The first such is to remove all the use of "..." and "word -- word" as these are just space wasting junk. Second is to use the proper spelling of words not adding additional characters as in "HMMMMMMMM" which should be simply "HMM" which in capitals is the common emotional way of doing it, also look for things like "pubic hairs" it reads poorly where as "pubic hair" would be a better choice.

I dont give many [5]s...

Mostly because like a 'Perfect 10' in sports, if everyone gets one then they dont mean as much. You got a [5] not because it was perfect, but because I'm already waiting for Chapter 2.

Keep Writing!

You'he outdone yourself. Exceptionally hot and a fresh take on familial lust. Looking forward to more.

This was quite possibly one of the hottest stories I have ever read on Literotica.

If you ever want or need an editor or proof reader, it would be an honor.

Omg!! Soooooo fucking good!! Can't wait for more!!!

Good story, very hot....got me hard as hell....hurry with the next chapter!!!

Looking for more stories of this naughty family.

looking for a threesome between the 3 of them.

Hope Jilly comes downs stars at watches her mom and daddy fucking in the livingroom.

You need therapy.

Rock on, Ahab.

It's sure seems I have seen similar thoughts from another phony. You truly need help and I think I know who you are so stop with the anonymous shit and get the help you need or just shut up.

A great start to a very erotic series.

Dad and daugher are destined to have a wild time when they actually fuck.

I hope that he gets his cock in his little girl's pussy in the next chapter.

Thanks for the read.

Once again, you have asserted your place as one of the premier incest authors at Lit... hell, premier authors of ANY genre! Cannot freaking wait to see where this one goes. And loved the scene with Sandra role-playing as daughter Jilly... so damn hot to have your partner indulge your kinkiest whims!!

Eagerly awaiting subsequent chapters! As another poster stated, "Rock on, Ahab!"

that story was sooo fucking hot!!!!

Keep it up- can't wait for more! I want to fuck the daughter myself!

I can't wait to read the rest! Keep them cuming! ;)

This story did exactly what it intended.... Had my imagination and among other things flowing. Great job.

My god I loved this story, I came 3 times while reading it . I can't wait for more!

I keep wrecking keyboards and monitors! Thanks!

And quite the tease you are! Master of making me drool for more of your awesome works! I and becoming a huge fan! I hope there is much more to come because I will be done with this series soon and I need more of this wonderful story-crack!

Thanks again!

Cheers!

Newtype

You always have great stories. Thanks.

That's what I like about your work you don't rush it like some story's I read. Other incest story's Iv read it just like the dad and daughter are all redy having sex and you get little to no rezone how it hapin but you like to relly get in to it a show how tow people bild up to and then finally brak tho the incest toboo, and I just want to say thank you.

And plz keep riting.

OMG so damn hot love getting my daughters friend!!!

wow very hot story, keep it up,like to see the daughters friend diann,and mommy go with it too. so please write some more..

Second read here, still love it! Having a hard time picturing him shoving four fingers into his daughter, what does she have down there, the holland tunnel? (Echo..echo..echo..;). My wife is 5'7" and wide hipped but if I had tried shoving four fingers up in her and tried to curve them up to her g spot she'd have air walked and kicked me off the bed at the same time, lol.

Loved it. Fucking hot.

Extremely well written. The author also has great timing within the story. Prolonging the ecstasy until you can't take it. Perhaps the best erotic story I've ever read with these particular themes (primary father-daughter incest but with other options open). I can't wait to read chapter 2.

Holy shit! That is the hottest thing I've ever read,

You an incest champion! this was so hot

Got a boner to end all boners. Can't wait for the sequel.

So clever to use a dancer at a porn club to "facilitate" the seduction. Great idea - never saw it before on this site. Well-written. Can't wait for mom to join in.

really fantastic story. well done. VERY SEXY!!! and well-written. 5 stars

A thirteen or twelve year old Jill in a tiny bikini was what breathed life into her own father's big cock? That's.........kind of hawt actually!

Kind of suprised that John didn't lay hands on her at that time. If she was my underage daughter, I would have definitely done more than just looking at her.

Underaged girls in bikinis are truly something else.

Aw man!

Really thought you were gonna include a naughty scene from the time when Jilly was a twelve year old bikini wearing little tease.

Just imagine her daddy getting playfully mad at her for showing off too much of her delicious skin to him. He can pull his barely clothed cock teasing daughter and tickle her bare skin and whisper how naughty and bad she's being as she giggles and gasps. He can explore even more by playing an impromptu game of horsey riding while cupping her little titties in his big strong hands. He could then ask her if she's ever seen a man's cock while humping up and grinning his big daddy cock into her bum cheeks and if she shyly answers yes he can give her some quick hard thrusts making little Jilly grunt before stating the need to punish her for being extra naughty. He could then have the youngster's draped over his lap as he caresses and kneads her bum while gently scolding her for her lewd attire, before he pulls the squealing Jilly's bikini bottoms down and give the little vixen a bare bum spanking as his rock hard fat cock throbs and twitches up against her little belly. It would have been fun and erotic at the same time. Ooooh....maybe he can even spread and roughly grope her bare cheeks during her punishment to sneak a quick peek at her pink bum hole and cunny. Perhaps even go a step further and make the twelve year old Jilly get on her knees in front of him and have her close her eyes and stick out her tongue so he can pull out his throbbing veiny daddy cock and give her a hot and sloppy baby batter facial as she giggles cutely. Just have him moan out her name and bust a fat cum load right on the little sluts face and make her gasp in shock and excitement. Missed opportunity in this chapter for that kind of family fun, perhaps you could have a flashback in the next chapter that involves forbidden fun between underage Jilly and her loving daddy.

I want to eat out 12 year old Jilly's tight virgin pink asshole after pulling down her skimpy bikini bottoms. Just bury my face up her cute little bouncy preteen booty and stick my tongue as far up her tasty anal ring as possible. I wonder how long it will take for me to make the young cock teaser have an anal orgasm from just having me rimming and tongue fucking her erotic hiney hole.

Maybe wrapping my arms around her petite lil waist and grinding my face even further up her forbidden soft butt will have her screaming in release much sooner.

Little white girls in bikinis are such fucking cock teases.

Anon below.

All you wanna do is eat out her kid booty until she cums from anal stimulation?

If I was you I would do a helluva lot more than that do the preteen cock teasing slut's virgin asshole. I would eat out her butt and play with her hairless little cunny at the same time to give her double the pleasure and make her cum extra hard to make her cute pink anus gape in relaxation from the aftermath of me making her cum. Then I would grope her little body all fucking over while kissing and making out with her pouty little girl mouth while she's facing me so that I can take off her slutty bikini bottoms off and stick a finger up her butt and stir it around as I'm shoving my tongue right down her delicious gullet and feasting on her yummy girl spit. After her asshole is slightly loosened I will strip naked and show her my big meaty cock and tell her that I will put every last thick inch of it up her goo hole. Then I will make her turn around so that I can hug her tight from behind as I'm forcing my love log up her kiddy shitter. Once I'm balls deep inside her slimy soft rectum I will shove her bikini bottoms inside her mouth to muffle her screams and wrap my arm around her throat to choke her as I take her forbidden underaged bumhole to pound town. I will fuck the ever living daylights out of Jilly's ass super fucking hard as she screams and squeals into her bikini gag. Once her asshole is on the cusp of taking my cock, balls, asshole and my very soul to nirvana I will reach around and finger fuck and roughly fondles her tight kitty to make sure she squirts and then just let myself go right up her booty hole. I will shout "YOU FUCKING KIDDY WHORE, YOU'RE MAKING MY COCK FART, TAKE IT ....TAKE IT YOU LITTLE COCK TEASING SLUT" as my cock is blasts white gunk up her guts.

I fucking love little naked girls. I wanna fuck suck and eat out all their holes.

Underage Jilly is sexy naughty and erotic as fuck. I wish I was her daddy so that I could teach her the consequences of teasing a grown man's big cock with their yummy immature little bodies.

Why didn't Jilly walk out buck naked infront of her daddy when she was a preteen?

If I was in her place I would have cock teasing the ever living cock cream out of him every single fucking day.

I find it interesting how a grown man like him got a throbbing boner after seeing his own preteen daughter in a skimpy bikini. Makes you wonder what he would have done to her underaged body if he had gotten the chance.

I'm pretty sure he would not have said no to Jilly trying to seduce him when she was a preteen.

At least his big daddy cock doesn't discriminate when it cums to mature or unripe pussies.

I came extra hard to this!

Okay, read some of the other comments here, before making my own...

I gotta say, this set of comments has shown me that "we" are a lot of perverts, with the talk about 12-and-13 year old Hilly, what some would have done with her...

Putting that out there has drawn attention to you/us, if we get identified...these sites ARE monitored and reported...not ceveryone' like people who like 'underage' girls...A LITTLE MORE DISCRETION, PLEASE!?

AS far as this story, one of THE MOST EROTIC INCEST STORIES EVER!D. The author has gone wwwwaaaayyyyyy beyond in his detailing this family's start into fun, and I ABSOLUTELY AM LOVING IT! I cannot wait for the next chapters, see how momma & others are brought into the whole thing (even tho' mom already is, what with her green-lighting' the start!)

Deserves more than **5*cOstars!! WWWAAAYYYHHY More!!

@MADDOGINTEXAS - Little girls wearing skimpy bikinis or underwear on the beach or by the are asking for it whether they realise it or not. So much naked skin just casually shown off by those little cock teasing sluts never fails to give me a raging boner. They are just so cute, innocent and oh so cock hardeningly erotic to me. I've only had one encounter with a naked underaged girl so far and although we never got around to having my fat cock stuffed inside her cunny we did fool around for an hour and she made me have two of the most powerful toe curling orgasms I've had in my life. This was last year when I was 20 and she was 8. Fuck, I'm already fully hard thinking about the nasty and lewd things that little tart did to my cock.

And yes it all happened because she was wearing a very tiny swimsuit when I bumped into her on the beach.

Very good start to this tale! Great when d a story makes me want to read quicker to get to what happens next.

What the heck? Where's the next episode?

Really enjoyed how John shared his love and lust and how Sandra was so understanding and accepting. Jilly, of course, was the center of attention and she played her part so well.

Very good mutually consensual love story between a father and daughter with a psychologically mature, self-assured and self-aware mother who possesses a solid ego and id. Having never fathered/raised a children, I have no knowledge, neither emotional nor psychological, of such a relationship. That said, based simply on story construction, character development and logical plot progression, story rated 5 stars.

Really enjoyed this series of stories, and hope it continues onward. Perhaps with the addition of some other family members? Perhaps an aunt, uncle, or even a grandparent. Some delicious possibilities!

That was delightfully unexpected!

Jilly is my kind of daughter. Playful, sexy and loves her daddy. He's a lucky guy.

This so so hits the spot for all my daddy kinks. Cant wait to read part 2