All Comments on 'The Neighbor'

Good story hoping for more

You need to get yourself an editor. Lots of spelling mistakes and grammatical errors and the storyline needs to be more fluent.

I liked the characters and the pace and in sum, the story. You did a nice job developing everything right up to the climax.

Thoroughly enjoyed. Not stupid "super fit, super young with gigantic boobs" drivel. Believable. Keep up the good work.

I really enjoyed the story with the exception of the previously editorial problems. The one thing that person didn't mention that is a glaring error for me is your change from past tense to present tense and then back again on the second page. I usually stop reading stories at that point, but your story was good enough for me to continue reading. I do urge you, as mentioned above, to get an editor. Your story line is captivating!

Very good story BUT you really must (along with about 80% of the other so-called 'authors') the difference between 'too' and 'to'. It really is important unless you want to appear to be a complete klutz author.

grammar freak has made 2 comments. grammar freak, will everybody out there make a comment to these grammar freaks to shut the hell up, because we all wont to read enjoyable sex comments of these stories instead of listening to this anonomous grammar freak. so if grammar freak doesnt like their grammar, just write your own book and get the hell off here, grammar freak is a jealous freak who that the only way he can feel better of himself is to put everyone else down

Loved the story. A few grammar problems that a good editor could fix but overall excellent story line. Well developed characters. Write some more please.