All Comments on 'The Neighbors'

wow dam why do you always only show one part i van never find the other parts on any of these stories that was so hot

Actually a pretty hot story and it had the ring of reality to it even with some writing errors.

Wow!!! What a fun story! Granted, switching from third person to first was a bit distracting, but what the heck!? This is your first story and it was extremely fun and realistic. Please keep writing.

I only got as far as "April thought to myself."

Don't let these "critics" get you down. Keep writing and people will offer their editing services to you. By the way, very hot story! I'm harder than Chinese algebra!

Your descriptions are vivid. Like I'm right there. I love the plot of two normal women exploring for the first time.

You have a sexy story to tell, and I look forward to reading more. But I second the suggestions about finding an editor. Keep writing!

You certainly know how to tell a hot, steamy tale, Wow, please don't stop submitting. Now, on to part 2.

Very well written and very erotic.↔ I want to watch my neighbor do this↩

Enjoyed the character build up and how they slowly got into the "act". Will be reading more.