All Comments on 'The Neighbour'

Love the plots, the twists & the excitement!

This start has so many possibilities. Look forward to reading the next instalment!

Well done...

A couple of examples -

"... dads ..." is plural, indicating that she had several fathers!!

Unlikely!!

What you meant, presumably, was 'dad's' - meaning 'belonging to her dad'!

"... she admired the way the leather became taught ... " - try 'taut'!!

I do not think that the leather was capable of learning anything!!

Thanks for your constructive comments, written in a non-constructive way! Whilst I appreciate all feedback on any of my stories, I'm not completely sure I was aware this was a grammar or spelling submission. Sure, I like to read correctly spelt text but do a few grammatical errors warrant the exclamation marks etc.? Given I am not a professional writer and of course write these stories for pure pleasure, not only for myself but for many others, I do not take your criticism personally or to heart.

Thanks again for the feedback 'anonymous'. Clearly it was too hard for you to string a legible, complimentary sentence together. :-)

Loved the story, even with those "massively" intrusive grammatical errors that the other reviewer pointed out! Really!!! That's all you've got to whine about on what is a fantastic story which has good pace and seems well thought out.

Please carry on this story, maybe in a next chapter in their lives or something because this definitely is a relationship that I'd love to know more about.

Thank you for this and please continue writing.

I'm fearful about commentting, you don't take critiques well :)

The struggle for me was the speed that Jess lost all inhibitions and innocents. One minute she'exploreing strange feelings on the back of a horse to a cock sucking slut in leather. The story could do with a better time line but I did read it to the and and there definitely some good, exciting bits in there. Thanks for posting :)