All Comments on 'The Nerd Ch. 02'

All over the place. You need an editor. No coherence. Might be a good story under there.

Just skimmed this after getting to the "fished for her eyes in her bag" line which made both of us laugh.

Please go back and edit this again and then repost.

I don't recall them being there. Huh, I will check and repost. Thank you.

And it should definitely be 'keys'.

Few errors, but i really enjoyed the story.. Simple, realistic and kinda cute, keep the errors as it is. It's not bad to have a good laugh often.

Please let there be more!

Of course there will be more.

Even though I like that you're fine with the errors, as a writer it doesn't feel as good to me. So I'm going to edit this. Thanks anyway.

Going along nicely, though, as noted, bulk errors in this chapter. (Specially on page 1)

My fave was when Lucy "fished for her eyes in her bag."

:)

xx

I had read chapter 1 before, but I decided to read it again before reading this chapter. I really enjoyed the entire story, and hope you plan on adding at least one more chapter. Thank you for sharing this with us!

Enjoyed this chapter also. Off to see if you added more. I hope so.