All Comments on 'The Never Series Pt. 01'

I got lost during what looks like a flask back and you ramble on about things that have no impact to the story! Otherwise this has potential!

I would suggest that the anonymous reader who commented on your transitions not read Faulkner, as it might blow his/her mind. I thought the use of flashback and recollection made the storytelling infinitely more interesting. As for the "rambling" of which you've been accused, I suggest the same reader finish this incredibly well-written story before deciding what details do or do not have "impact" on the rest of the tale. It's called character development, and you do it extremely well.

It may be a little long winded but it is well written throughout this instalment.