All Comments on 'The Niece'

It could use an editor's help. Some of the paragraphs seem far too long for a single idea and just ramble on.

This could have been a wonderful story but it is just too hard to read. There are numerous spelling and grammatical errors in just the first few paragraphs and spots that become very redundant. Get yourself a GOOD editor to help with these things and it will help with the flow of the story and will be an easier read. I couldn't finish because of these issues. Good luck with this but please consider an edited version.