by pinnaclegold
Oh wow, gorgeous story, beautifully written. Loved it, got me very aroused. Well done, a brilliant first story. Please write more, you have a gift.
....with the previous commentators.
pg, you show excellent writing skills and a talent for describing a vibrant and realistic fiction.
You reveal your characters as real people we would want to know. Their conversations and interactions are believably those of young adults.
I am looking forward to your future postings.
Not only hot as hell but also sweet and funny and I finished it wanting to know more about your characters. I felt the end was a little rushed but otherwise well written. Very nice that you were able to address the issues of consent and contraception, and still make it sexy. Great first effort.
Did they win any ribbons at the show?!