All Comments on 'The Night-time Visitors'

Tidy!

Scary stuff.

I've only ever had a single incident of deep sleep paralysis like this, after too much dope and a stupid seance (you're only eighteen once...) - but my body felt possessed. Scared the bejesus out of me, and can still remember it 40 years on.

I can't imagine what it must be like if it's a regular thing. Shiver.

My wife suffers sleep paralysis occasionally. I can sometimes tell because her breathing becomes panicked even though she's asleep. I just shake her awake though. If I tried to get fresh with her during those I'm pretty sure she'd kill me afterwards. ; p

To answer your question - you can write. You brought the feelings of unease, of anxiety across with a vengeance. Telling a scary story is a tall order, and telling one well, leaving the reader shivering in it's wake is no mean feat.

Well done.

Note, you forgot an "is". "This definitely a recurring theme."

Revisiting this story: a short time after publishing this tale, I moved house, from the rented London property back to the family home in Wales. I've only had a few light bouts of sleep paralysis since, despite my sleep still being erratic and disturbed at times, and certainly nothing as full blown as this. Same bed, similar sleep patterns, but no One or Two.

Was it the house? Was it my imagination? I really cannot say.