All Comments on 'The Night We Announced Our Engagement'

You keep moving from present to past tense and back.

Stories are best told in the past tense because you are relating something that has happened, not something that is happening now.

Very offputting.

Good start here. I agree that you need to stay in one or the other mode. That would be in the present as we are learning as the characters are learning.

Loved the foreshadowing by mentioning "we have the same birthday". Over all well written, but yes, the tenses switching is distracting, though not hugely so.

Interesting. It's not much of a twist given the title and category. But it was done differently than expected, so points for that.

Now that all of the Players are known. Maybe we can find out how everything goes with Dad in the Mix. Do he and Mom get back together or does it drive a wedge between Father and son. with father blaming the Mother.

That was a fun read. Any chance of a follow-up, like he knocked em both up that night! That would be hot as well.

As soon as you revealed they are the same age and had the same birthday the ending popped up in front of me. Switching tenses didn't help either, as it just made it even more cumbersome to begin with. Sorry, its a 2* at best

Great story, that was an un expected twist.

Great story. AAAAA+++++