All Comments on 'The Nordward Family'

(1.) Why did the family treat Dean as if he didn't exist to begin with?

(2.) For someone who didn't want anything to do with his family, Dean reconciled pretty quickly with them.

One the father wanted another set of girls to have a harlem, two Dean was mentally broken after his son he just didn't wish to be alone.

his hate for his family changed way to fast . from whores to lovers at one look.

could not finish your tale.

Did I miss the explanation for all this? What in the hell was going on on the first page? WHAT was going to be explained to him?

2*

JimC

Excellent buildup to a very erotic tale. I hoe there are more chapters.

As for more chapters I haven't thought about it.

Review before posting please

The numbers don't add up. He leaves home at 14, is away for 18 years, is the youngest child and his mother is presently 48?

Let the numbers make sense

Great story hope you decide to add more chapters.

My expectations of this story went down after each chapter, he hates his family, he doesn't see them for more than a decade, but as soon they walk into his office he gives No resistance. Your other stories are the same, I love the premise of the son hating the family and wanting to leave, but than theres no begging for forgiveness, it just moves on to them getting together...

Yeah I was kind of confused too since he basically wanted nothing to do with them and his resolve just crumbled away. I chalked it up to his loss for his son and walking around life in a zombie state. The premise of the story is very good maybe he comes back to reality on future chapters. If it turns into a long series I will read it

Talk about stupid. Others have already pointed out the big error. And they pile up quickly from that point on. 1*

Sort of a good start but it needs at least one more chapter where he takes over the family and business empire.

Interesting never thought about that I'll give it some thought.

crawling all over each other, was fooled by all those who favorite it. Just not my cup of Tea. l wish you well.....

I want to start by saying that I like where you're going with your stories. I'm a huge sucker for both incest and redemption stories, and you're hitting on both of those. I really do see potential in this story and your abandon series and I hope you keep writing and don't get discouraged.

Now there are some problems holding your stories back in general. The clear lack of editing is by far the biggest factor, I keep running into far too many spelling errors, grammar errors, or parts of the story that simply do not make sense. Some of the errors make me think you might be a second language speaker, which might explain this. I really recommend that you proofread more before posting and if you can get another person to edit it for you. Try looking for an editor on the literotica forums. AS long as the most glaring errors get address it will go along way to improve your stories.

Once more I like what you're doing, just it needs more polish. Also pacing and characterization could use some work but I'm sure that will improve in time.

for someone that was treated so bad as a youngster it sure didn't take much for the family that treated him like shit to break his resolve ,and for him to forgive them

I agree with other readers, after all, those years of shit and then they come into office mother gives him a blowjob and he fingers his sister in less than 5 min and all is forgiven and becomes their fuck toy. hard to believe, what happened to all the hate he had for them. I gave it a 3 star

And, I don't write these stories to please everyone. I do it because the stories demand to be written nothing more nothing else. Do have a nice day.

In the scene where they talk about joining and boarding school it looked like the mother got emotional. How come his siblings never spent time with him and didn't back him up when he needed them and yet his sister's fuck him in the end like they didn't throw him away like a dirty sneaker. Maybe in another​ chapter they have a family meeting to come to terms with everything that has happened.

This is just a suggestion but you could write this​ story in different points of view to there thoughts​ on what happened well all except the sperm donor.

Hope Margaret gets pregnant

Good fucking comments. Got me hard fast

Thanks for the feedback.

Had trouble understanding the dynamic of the family. I will need to read it to try and understand why he was treated so mean.

I believe Kathleen was supposed to be 48. How could this be.

Dean 14 when he was exiled to boarding school. Four year of boarding, 18. Now 13 years after working, now 31. She had 5 children before Dean. How could she have all those kids and still be 48?

It's be nice to see how the whole situation got starred with his family. Not to mention why they all snubbed him for years. The concpet that his mom wore the pants in the family is interesting as well. It seems like the mother only wanted him for her own selfish reasons and if she got her just deserts be fun to see. Many possibilities for different story plots there. Look forawrd to reading more

good story. i would have liked an explanation as to why the whole family treated him so bad before he went overseas.

Good story and good relationship in the story

what the hell? They're having fun. 4*.

He was 100% rejected by his so-called family for his entire childhood.

What would have made any sense at all would have been him writing his letter of resignation when they got to his office, not immediately jumping into being a full part of them.

That he went to the trouble and expense of changing his name and left no contact information shows how he felt about them.

If he was that desperate for other people it would make more sense to reconcile with his cheating whore wife, she treated him less badly than that 'family'.

I think there's more to this story that meets the eye.

The behaviour of the family drove home away. After changing his identity, moving, severing all contact, and forsaking his membership in their family, why would he willingly rejoin them as if he never left?

I am thinking Dean has a plan. While he is getting more pussy than any of us he could be plotting revenge.

Please keep going

Hello all, question? Show hands how many wants a second part.

Yes please do a second one

Soul71 I would love a 2nd part

would love to read a 2 chapter

by getting all his sister's pregnant

as his mother

As others have said, all the years of neglect and he just goes with them when they show up, very disappointing. I understand your comment about dad wanting more girls but that doesn't explain why everyone else treated him like crap. Especially if it was the mom's money, then it isn't like the dad had all the power to control everyone to ignore the son. I like a lot of your stories and I enjoy this type of story in general with revenge on a crap family but there was no revenge and they never actually said sorry or showed remorse.

2nd plz

Good story but Maths don't work. Mum 48 dean 32 so she was 16 when he was born yet he had siblings at least 4 years older than him.

It sucked. Just once I would like to read a story where a guy didn't think with his dick and stay true to his conviction. Weak minded individual

Started good but kind of disappointed that he gave in so quickly

Some revenge on the ex would be nice, should you want to continue this one.

Please continue this story with dean's revange

Love this story

I would love to read how Dean takes over the family.

It had a good start but he caved in to quickly, should have had him deny them and just keep trying to seduce him for a while, when his ex also tracks him down.

Cant wait for next chapter.

when you have the time please continue this story

I wanted to know how many babies he put in each woman including his mother

What a fantasy this story is

Please continue with this story

Yes seriously we need more of this story! I honestly love all of these family drama stories. I keep looking for more of them and just keep coming back here to reread yours! Keep up the awesome job

This is a super interesting premise. However to many lose threads. I understand Dean is emotionally compromised but why does he just cave to his family, which up to this point the story points to him having very serious issues with all of them. The wife thread is dropped to quickly as well. This might have worked better if it was Dean finally joining the family with revenge on his mind, after either being seduced or finally getting his pound of proverbial flesh. Also Dean becoming the family head because of a big dick, probably gonna have to deal with some jealousy from his brothers. But overall I liked the story, sex was well described. Just could have been better if the story was expanded and a lot of the issues addressed, rather than the family shows up and he caves and essentially submits

I think there's a bit of a disconnect between the premises here: If John wasn't shown any kind of love growing up, how is it that his parents were going to let him join their orgies when he reaches the age of 18? That makes no sense. I would think that if you don't show any kind of love for your kid, it likely means you hate them, so why give them any chance to join in an activity that requires some kind of passion and affection?

Also, if everyone in his family loves him, why didn't his siblings rally around him when their parents first started showing distaste for him? I get that they'd probably have been wrapped in incestuous passion, but one would at least expect the loving sister to show some kind of affection towards him from an early age, not just after he finds out about the sex. This story reminds me a bit too much like the latter half of Broken Circle, but instead of the son rejecting the offer to join in out of pity, he whole-heartedly joins without a second thought and has little to no feelings of rage or contempt.

I still enjoyed the depictions and I got plenty hard from the reading, I'm just a bit confused.

Loved it... Hoping for at least a part two!!!

Soo, we just gonna ignore the fact he means so little to his family and just let them in… with no hassles, he just accepts them after everything they did…

I know you have a few more stories in the works, but this one could do well with a sequel.

Damn, a little pussy and the guy gets over the death of his son and the years of familial neglect and abuse pretty quick

Good

Besides it was pretty hard to believe it was a decent story but I'm positive a man isn't going to be so trusting that quickly to a family that didn't want anything to do with him for years and positive he wouldn't be trusting of a woman again so easy either but it was pretty good story

This is a good start to what could be a very good series. Maybe, you could revisit it someday. 4 Stars

While I have to say it is hard to believe that happening after the years they didn't want anything to do with him besides his sister Margaret if her back dialogue is to be believed However you never claimed it to have any realistic views to the story while you didn't claim it didn't either really means nothing it is a erotic fantasy/fiction story so it should have been assumed it wasn't going to be believable with that being said I think you should have wrote a follow up to this like does he fully rejoin the family did Margret or any of his other sisters or even his mom get pregnant there still seems to be more to tell with this story

Currently on my 3rd reread this year, still have it one of the best on the site

There’s more to this story just waiting for you to release it from your twisted mind. Soul71 I have yet to read a story of yours that wasn’t purely AMAZING you have a gift good sir eep using it.

Although I liked the story; there are some missing parts imo. Like how you set it up that the MC was badly treated emotionally by his family. But when he meets them, he doesn't resist their advances at all ! Surely, he would be angry at them ? And then the ball starts rolling even faster. Imo, they should've needed more time to win him over. So this story seems rushed to me.