All Comments on 'The Novelist Pt. 02'

wrought iron table, not rod iron

Thanks to everyone that took the time to read my story. I'm working on the continuation already. I love getting feedback - good or bad. So please leave comments and vote. I'd really love to hear any thoughts on the direction this story should take. Again thanks to everyone. I've really enjoyed writing on this site.

As good as any novel I have ever read and the details are fabulous! I can't wait to read the next installment!

fucked up

This has got to be one of if not the BEST story I have ever read.PLEEEEEASE continue.

Your original decision was the right one. It doesn't belong here.

Really well written story, there aren't really any areas to improve that I can think of (not that there isn't probably room for improvement I'm just not a good enough writer to know where it would be). You ask in your comment for idea's for where to go from here. Anywhere that strikes your interest really. Personally I like the plan of playing the legal side of the story, but that is just me, and there are deffinetly many valid routes from here. His plan right now is probably undouable, there must be hundreds of good divorce lawyer's in new york, trying to get all of them away from a trial would be insane. Even if you managed by that time he had enough time to hide significant amounts of the money, and getting accountants away from him would be impossible. However there are other ways to ruin him. The obvious way is to get the tape in as evidence, I am not familiar with US divorce law but I do believe there is some option of allowing evidence in that would otherwise not be allowed because not doing so would make a mockery out of the legal system (or something like that). Or you could just sue him for millions of other things, harass him so he can't get a job, publish the tape online from a fake hacking attack by a hactivist group. That sort of thing.

Oh yea other commenters are right when they say this is better in the BDSM section then the Incest/Taboo section.

I personally don't believe that the classification matters, the story blends well between the two genres.

As far as plotting is concerned, this is simply fantastic. Showing the emotional depths of these life choices, as well as the insights required for the characters is superb.

One thing that I have noticed in both #1 and #2 is that you need to have a fresh pair of eyes review your stories for simple word choice and grammatical errors. When I came across those, they pulled me out of the story by drawing my attention to the error rather than the story. One example "Alexis said you did spectacular yesterday." should read "...you were spectacular yesterday." or "...you did spectaculary yesterday." A minor nit, to be sure, but noticeable nevertheless.

What I've always loved about your writing is how emotionally connected you're able to write your characters. Part 1 I wasn't thrilled with because it felt like there was a cold element to your main character. I couldn't understand what Alexis saw in Tom. I thought she was emotionally invested, but I didn't feel like that with Tom. It probably had something to do with the large amount of submissives he was training, and then to add on his mother --- it just felt like a lot. It took away the particular element I've loved in your previous stories.

As we move on to Part 2, I'm starting to get a better understanding where you were coming from and how/why Part 1 was set up the way it was. I'm starting to see that all of this is part of his lifestyle, and maybe how I was viewing Part 1 was because of lack of understanding in the way Tom chooses to live his life. I still think that the amount of submissives he has is a bit excessive, but at least now I think I'm starting to understand why. They seem to all offer specific qualities that are attractive, and maybe they do bring out the best in each other and in Tom.

Now, on to the incest element of this entire story (which by the way, I don't see the incest as the main aspect of this story). This was another thing I didn't quite understand in Part 1. Initially, I felt like this was Tom using the one thing he knew how to do to comfort his mother, instead of being the son she needed. But, as Part 2 unfolds (and hopefully Part 3 clarifies), it looks like he was doing what she needed. Maybe he saw that before I did as a reader.

All in all, this is a great story. I would ignore the comments on the grammatical errors, quite frankly - I didn't catch more than a few errors, and it didn't take away from my experience at all. Much better than Part 1 in my opinion, and I'm assuming it's only going to get better in Part 3. Congratulations on a story well written.

I just love the combination of submission and incest. The emotional involvement makes the story so strong and real. I can't wait for the next chapter, for Marie's husband to get his licking, I hope it is painful.

I'm astounded at how good this story is. The writing is superb, as is the storyline. The mixture of BDSM and incest is a winning combination in my book. Long may you continue to produce work of this very high standard, to the utmost pleasure of myself and your other fans. Thank you for it!

I have enjoyed the story mix so well absolutely very well blended please CONTINUE!!!!

Can't wait for the next chapter. Hope to see Aunt Jane reappear in the story soon. Take your time and write as many chapters as you need...don't rush it.

First of all I HAVE TO thank you, from the bottom of my heart, for writing this series. After reading chapter 1 I finally found my own inspiration to start writing again. There aren't enough words in all languages of earth combined to thank you enough for that.

Not that that's said.. I would like to say that your writing is nothing short of superb and the weaving of this story... sublime! Somehoe you've managed to take everything, put it in a blender and make a tasty "pervertion-lust-love-beauty" smoothie!

This second chapter really shoots this series off. The first one was a perfect opener and made all the necessary introductions, whereas this one is starting to mold the story into something that grips and captivates your readers. The intricate plot told with your superb and beautiful use of the language is a rare privilege to read. The fact that it has enough hot, steamy and perverted sex to make the most seasoned prostitute blush... that just makes it all that much better!

This is a very appealing story series: interesting and varied characters, a plot that is still taking shape in intriguing ways and a perspective on both BDSM and incest that make each both exciting and more comprehendable. Bravo!

That said, I confess I was left hanging a bit by the end of Part 2: as readers we were titillated, indeed turned on, but, like some of the characters, were weren't allowed to finish... I suspect that I am not alone in planning to come (?cum) back for more.

I just spent the last few hours reading the first part AND this part, and wow. You are a really excellent writer, Nicequip. It's not just about sex/fuck/submission but it's more about how the characters evolve and grow and help each other with their needs/wants/desires. The incest combination with the D/s lifestyle is very intriguing. How Tom is the son, and she's the mother, yet she can serve. Amazing. Sir, please, continue to write. Not only this storyline, but to write in general and always keep me posted, regardless. I can't wait until your next write. MUWAH

When can we read chapter 3. You need to continue to story about what happens to Tom's dad in court? How and what are the changes between Alexis and Marie? Does Tom have any children by his sluts? If so, how is that growing up into a household of submissive women? etc.... Please write Pt. 03

Blessings & Happy New Year

It is one of the best I have read on this site. Every thing seems like its natural. I don`t even have words to describe what an awesome read it was. It was just....... GODLIKE.

Everybody wins with their surrender ( but the cheating dad ). The divorce is an excellent wrinkle in plot & keeps the carnal antics from wearing thin. Asiring B&D writers take note. It's not just about the noose.

My comment on your first story may not have been totally fair, even though I was nice. I'm seeing Marie more as just a slave than his mom, which makes it a little less uncomfortable for me now.

Your writing is superb. Very nice.

Love this!!

Great story.... i cant stop reading it.... even been latebleaving for work cause its so good

You are a skilled, completely enjoyable writer, however the story line is the best I have found here, Continue to share your skill

This is getting better all the time.

At this late date this maybe off your radar. I’m truly enjoying Tom’s dominance without the sadistic tendencies and the role of the savior to the submissives.

i know its already finished, but well... not a fan of sharing mc women or swinging. ill try to read further but it's apparent that his "harem" will be shared with other men.

I have rather enjoyed the story thus far, and I can't wait to see how he gets back at his father beyond simply having all the lawyers refuse to represent him.

The dynamic between Tom, Lexi & Marie is nice but there are too many people involved., lacks reality,

Yeah right, all good bar one nagging problem. Why did Frank let Anne sign the contract.she already serves a Master. She cannot serve two masters. What gives?

Excellent, you have my hooked.

Wargamer, her signing the contract didn't mean she is serving 2 masters. It's an NDA that anyone that's been in his circle will have to sign. Other than that he is a dom and a friend of her master, so she showed her respect to her master by kneeling to his friend.

Great story! Much more emotion from Tom.

The only mistake you made was saying his mother told his aunt what books he wrote, she didn’t know he was the author of the dominant bestseller books till the next day when she read the inscription on alexis book and went to confront hi. Great story I love the idea and how well it’s written though.