All Comments on 'The Office - Holiday Weekend'

Why is this in Loving Wives, and not in Erotic Coupling or whatever? I got the impression that they're both really good friends, and neither one of them is married (any more).

I have no idea. The tag says "loving wife." Whose wife? There isn't a wife or husband in sight at all that I noticed. Admittedly, I skimmed, but why is this here? EC seems like the place for this. Nothing disgusting. Office romance is always a bad idea, but I can't imagine why this story is here.

:)

enjoyed it

No matter the story, good or bad, all we do is bitch.Any wonder we only have a few stories each day to read.What writer wants to post here and just get insane comments.Think about it readers..

wrong category.

Where did he work again?

some times the comments are way out in left field. there are some thin lines at to the right place to post a story... for me this is as good of place as any.. If readers do not believe this goes on in the work place , I feel sorry for them. 5

She's right. He's suck a dork.

Giving a co-worker a blow job in the office? That's a bit unusual.

Needs a proofread or an editor would be better. The story was short but had a good theme to it. I didn't get the impression that either was still married, so loving wives seems the wrong category. That doesn't matter that much, but several times the details were a bit off, and a few times even the word I wasn't capitalized. Anyhow, thanks for sharing!

Thanks

I thought about it and as far as I'm concerned this story doesn't belong in loving wives. I lost interest in the story when it became obvious this author needed an editor. The lack of commas made this an irritating read. Anon, I reserve the right to bitch about any story that doesn't meet my criteria of erotica. I'd rather have no postings than the trash that's passed off as erotica. Plenty of good authors left to read, even if it means going back to the archives or a different category. 2*

I had to laugh at your comment. You seem to think it's okay to throw a story into any category. NO it's not. Categories were established for a reason, to give the reader a choice of the type of story they prefer to read. If I want to read IR, I go to IR, if I want to read erotic coupling, I go to EC, if I want to read romance, I go to romance, get the drift? For some reason, loving wives is becoming the dumping ground for other categories, especially the Fetish one. Category aside, this author needs to acquire a good editor. The high score it's getting is an insult to the really good authors who post in this category, but nothing should surprise me about the LW reader.

What is this story all about? I don't see any mention of a wife or husband, two co workers get together, big deal. No story here, why Loving Wives section????

BUT a very good, caring, short story. I hope that you continue it.

There was probably some grammar problems, but I didn't notice.

But there is no need to be rude and obnoxious about it. I still think it's a pretty good story. I'm a little confused on the setting of them working in a department store or bank, but nonetheless, like the story.

I've considered writing and posting to this category, but can't get past the negative energy and feel that writing here would be a waiste of my time. I don't feel I would get the proper feedback I would need to improve. It's sad that the stories posted in LW are of little number daily. Leads me to think that writers are moving away because of the negative energy. Lit needs to really do something about it before this category no longer functions at all.

Categories? Welllll, maybe she's on the way to becoming a loving wife. I liked it wherever it is listed!

Now the finish, marriage or job loss. Romance or war. In The HR dept.

This appears to be the first story by this author. Very good start. and the story finished very well, leaving the end to the story to the reader. Suggest that you continue writing.

erotic or romantic but not LW material.

And is it a department store chain or a bank?

Other than that not a bad first story. 3*

Step one: cry like a little bitch every fucking time you read a story that doesn't suit your taste.

Step two: cry like a bitch that no good authors ever post to this category anymore.

Congratulations, assholes. You reap what you sow.

"I'm no expert but guessed her breasts were much larger than D cups."

I almost got past the fact you changed where he worked within few paragraphs, but then you turned in to a typical male writer on here and over exaggerated the size of her breasts. 1*

I liked the story, nice effort, but pay attention to your categories or all the anony's will whine. Or expand this in a multi-part story with marriage in the mix!

But would have scored it a point higher if it was in the right category.

until she decided to play office slut. "Oh, your a nice intelligent gentleman, we've been platonic friends for so long, and now you want to date and get to know each other better? Great, let's start with me sucking your cock. Not saying they won't be loyal love birds for the rest of their lives, but she does seem to be a bit needy, and impetuous, and presumptuous. Most lasting relationships seem to have gradations of intimacy over a period of time to forge trust and respect. Guess they already got that in the bag, at least as far as she is concerned.

Reminds me of a blind date where the guy says, "Hello bitch, you wanna fuck?" "Normally no, but I will for you, you smooth talking bastard."

Thanks for the offering. This reads more like the beginning of a series. I hope you do. But unless they are going to get married, and she plans on continuing being the office slut, for other guys, this should be in the Romance category.

Thanks for the effort. And thanks for not making this some stupid cuckold story.

I can't believe someone said that. Yes, there were a few glitches; but this story had the best punctuation of the several stories I read today. Most authors throw in so many totally unnecessary commas. I found it to be a sweet story. Gave you a 5 rating. And who cares if it appears it was in the wrong category? That is a poor reason for rating it low. Please don't get discouraged by the hoi polloi! Keep writing.

No wives in this story. That's a pretty basic requirement of LW. There has to be a wife in it somewhere, whatever else you do. What possessed you to put it here and why was it approved? Otherwise, it was pretty boring, so 1* all around.

It's obvious you've never written anything, since grammar isn't part of your vocabulary.

Who cares that's it's in the wrong category? It appears many. Categories were established for a reason in case you didn't know that. Why do you suppose there is a category called erotic coupling, romance, loving wives, interracial etc. Are you really that dense, or just plain stupid?

Bank or chain of department stores

A story has a beginning, middle, and ending.

This one had a beginning, and made some progress on the middle.

Then just quit.

The story did not go very far.

Neither did my rating.

Paul in Oklahoma

No loving wife, but still a good story.

Very good, plausible and no nastiness, must be thousands of single co workers out there hoping something like this story happens.