All Comments on 'The Palace Pt. 08'

The Good:

-The sex and plot mesh with each other in a way that is rare.

-The characters are all likable and well-explained.

-The plot devices that are used are logical and believable, adding to the reader's immersion in the story. I have occasionally thought that there is a combination of ruthlessness and kindness necessary to rule.

-At no time does a character act with uncharacteristic immaturity.

The Bad:

-What bad? Just kidding; the only possible weakness clear to me at this time is the lack of immaturity in the characters. Mind, this is not a clear weakness...but no person is perfect.

I suppose that in this situation...if a person is not perfect, they are dead. This would be a powerful motivator.

Hard to nitpick at the story given how good it is but I'll give it a try.

Carrach needs to start using his brain a little bit more, and I don't mean the little one, he can't be falling asleep on people. If he doesn't wise up a bit more he is going to get rekt. So far he has made some progress but his naivety is slowing him down.

As for the other characters...

Nanka I like her, she doesn't say much but she is interesting. For some reason I think she is more than you let show.

I just love that your leading men as good people and also smart and have distinct personalities. Great writing AE:) Thanks!!

Liked how Bishkur had Carrach "overhear" his conversation with his mother. However, it also revealed Bishkur hadn't learned enough to please the concubines with Carrach's previous assistance. You really threw a sabo into the machinery with Elseya (how could anyone miss her lack of speaking/understanding their language?)

Love how Carrach learns about the politics and adapts--plus it seems he has a huge ally in Nanka. She's really endearing, by the way! Thanks for loosening her up and having her speak more with Carrach.

Another 5. :)