by AlexRed
When exactly did she change her "unexciting salmon" panties to the "useless black ones"?
I am struggling hard to find something to like about this piece. It is so far removed from any sense of reality with real emotions that a college dorm filled with inexperienced hate machines is probably the perfect place to set it. I don't know if the author is really that naive or has a psychological problem but this is a good example of everything that is wrong with erotic writing on the web. Learn to love and appreciate women, and then you might figure out how to please them. When you have done that your writing will get better.
Seriously, enough with all the weird cow/ pig references. You making the girl seem like an actual pig/ cow is bizarre and makes it seem like beastiality.