All Comments on 'The Predatory Glance'

i really loved the way you wrote this, it was soft but naughty at the same time. very nice!

umm, pay attention to your tenses though, you went from "her" to "you" in the middle of the story. but when you changed the tense to "you" i found myself more involved with the characters, i could see myself in your story. so just a hint from me, that's one way to reach your readers. but oh yes, you definitely should write more and soon. i'll be waiting!