All Comments on 'The Program Ch. 06-11'

sprew so much hate

If you don't like BDSM, don't read it. The author of this story has a brain with much more capacity than yours. They are creative. They also understand spelling, grammar, sentence structure and phrasing. Perhaps you are brilliant in ways that we will never know. Unfortunately, your brilliance does not even extend to spelling words like "spew", which you spelled "sprew". Just as a joke, I asked my eight year old daughter how to spell it. I've got some bad news for you: You are not smarter than a 3rd grader!

You let your 3ed grader read what daddy was reading while he played with himself? Bad daddy, mommy is going to make you wear panties and a cock cage.

Nice story. Name issues need to be tidied up. Progressed too quickly. More non-sexual description and story development would enhance story. Thanks for the read. - J

Several times you mixed Janice and Janine. The first time I noticed that was when you had Janice sit next to you in the car and Janice sit in the rear seat. Do you proofread you work? I suggest you go back through the story and correct names where needed and re-post the story.

I like the story, but as a dyslexic I had to read the bottom half of the first page FIVE times before I noticed the N switched for the C in their respective names

I get that many families employ alliterative name structures, but its hell on dyslexics when then names of story characters are that close

Just something for authors to keep in mind

I have enjoyed both stories and was wondering if there was any chance for more chapters. Perhaps Janice could return to Ansonia as a graduate student or a student teacher. And what will Janine's progress be or perhaps the Headmaster could bring Janine with him to visit Janice's new school.

A beautifully crafted and prepared story, although the use of two names that are so similar caused not only the readers, but also the author, serious problems. An independent proofreader and editor would reduce the number of grammatical and spelling errors. Although this story a few years old I believe that further chapters could be added, as the leads are already in situ.