All Comments on 'The Prom Night'

a couple of observations - first, the title of The Prom Night makes it sound like a teenager story, which doesn't really tell what the story is about. It sounds as though you love your wife very much and that your sex life is as good as your children will allow (relax, they will be off to college very soon). The writing itself is clear and straightforward. It is almost too descriptive. Kind of a narrative play-by-play. There isn't any real story or tension, just an "I got to fuck my wife and it was hot" sort of diary entry.

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story, even though I was expecting it to be something different with the title. I hate when people capitalize the word cumming, it's not a title. You write well, but there could have been dialogue maybe between you and your wife that would have made it better and shown more emotion in the story. Good job otherwise though.

I liked the story... and something was missing. It may have been that thge story was written as a monologue. It may have been that we know almost nothing about either player in the drama. Develop their characters. Character development might get me to care about them as people.