All Comments on 'The Red Pill'

Shouldn't this be erotic horror or maybe mind control?

Can I guess that the red pill has something to do with the mysterious illness? You could expand on that. But, Crystal Jade or Crystal Lee, a main character with two names in the same paragraph even. Did you proof read before submitting? Otherwise I liked it.

Well done on turning the premise of Thinner into an erotic story. Could have developed the characters way more though and made the sex more explicit and the illness more prolonged and horrific.

Stephen King doesn't hold back in describing the obscene in minute detail. You could have done much better in that regard.

Really interesting! Would have liked you to expand more on the sexual part. This is what people want to read :)

Too bad you can see the ending from a mile away. Not bad overall.