All Comments on 'The Regiment Ch. 01: Trucked Hard'

What a let down of a ending........

For a first story this is very well done. Your use of language is excellent. Your disclaimer about suspending disbelief really isn't necessary, compared to most 'military' stories on this site, this is almost a documentary! You put in enough detail to make the military background seem authentic, without swamping the story with unnecessary exposition. You build up the mutual attraction between your two characters at a nice slow pace, which adds erotic tension. The ending is a bit abrupt, but as it's a first chapter rather than a complete story, I don't agree with the previous comment that it's a let-down... in my view, it's a hook, and I want to find out what happens to the lovely Corporal at Hereford!

Very good first submission - thank you.

I enjoyed it a lot. hope you keep letting us read your work.

Too bad about the ending but a good start, looking forward to more chapters. Cam nets in the back of the truck :)

Oh, Capt. Andy sounds like a fucking gem! Give that sex machine a hairy chest and give both of them round two!

Thanks for the feedback. It is really appreciated.

I have put up Chapter 2 but it involves different characters. Corporal Upper and Captain Farnham will reappear later. Andy will definitely have a hairy chest as requested!

The ending to this story is very abrupt. Agreed. When I wrote it I saw this as a cliffhanger between elements of a larger series. But this is Literotica, not Netflix, so each story must stand on its own merits. I will try to correct in the future.