All Comments on 'The Rendezvous Ch. 02'

Just shift into first person and be done with it!

I'm with the previous commenter. This is either first or third person. If it's third person, you don't even need an editor to fix it: it shouldn't have any occurrences of "me", "my" or "myself". And then choose whether (s)he's going to be Nick or Nikki. As it is, I'm convinced that Nick IS gay, because he only occasionally seems to think of himself as Nikki.