All Comments on 'The Ride'

Football coaches understand the value in cheerleaders, ESPECIALLY in Texas. Cheerleaders are more than glorified perv material, they are part ambassador, part motivational coach, part eye candy and part entertainment. The team that couldn't afford to bring their cheer team is an embarrassment and would be laughed outta town.

The idea that she would be morally opposed to masterbating and be fine with having an affair is ludicrous.

Not bad, not bad at all for a first story. Hope we see more like this from you in the future..

Thanks for writing, and more please. tom anon

P.S. I'd buy her a bus

My wife likes most the humorous style of the story's imaginative parts.

Decent first effort, but didn't quite achieve literary liftoff. I did like the vicarious drift sensation that's the author gave the narrative. The main problem being the actual narrator was a vacuous, stereotype milf. The repercussions , in terms of being good or bad, from tryst was glossed over. That is fine if the genre is erotic couplings but not in loving wives.

This author has some notable tools in literary trick bag . This came off, however, as a promising writing exercise rather then a complete tale, which I freely admit is better then average as a premiere effort. Sort of a private investigation report by a Barbara Cartland wannabe.

I loved it; just the right amount of conflict and sass. More realistic than a James Bond movie, so who cares about anything else. 5*

Wank tale.

I liked how Rachelle was both in control and out of control. Her and the coach are both antagonist and antagonized.

You have talent. The ability to take us into the mind of your protagonist,in a

realistic and sympathetic manner is a gift. Especially when the character is doing

something 'bad'.

The story itself was mundane. A common idea.

Looking forward to the next one.

AMerryMan

Husband doesn't pay attention once in 19 years so she cheats on him?

What a selfish cunt.

1*

But why the dichotomy? She not only fantasized at being the agressor with the cable man she was def the agressor with the coach.

However she was pissed at her husband bc he didn't "read the signs" that she expected sex ( the signs being that she shaved her legs and was wearing perfume) but the "signs" she gave the coach was to grind her cooch against his pecker while tickling his tonsils.

Her parting words about wanting lots more rides also doesn't square with her earlier self-admonition from her "deeply entrenched" southern baptist roots about not touching herself. HUH?

Still not a bad first effort. Better than most that try to address themes like this. 5* bc it's a first try - encouragement of sorts.

The background detail fed easilly and quickly to pull me into the dreary state of this sexually starved middle aged woman. Her arousal by the cyclist came as no surprise. Nor the continued fantasy of the cable man. All of these details of sexual arousal seemed believable and logical. The trick ending was more icing on the cake than contrived. It was her triumph. Well earned after 19 years of marriage to a turnip.

Although she sold herself out a bit too cheaply, She should not only got the bus, but some money for uniforms for her girls, since she is probably going to be fucking the coach for a long time.

She's a woman who knows how to get what she wants.

Had her husband extramarital activity with other woman five years later she would forgive him?

The slow descent into madness beautifully captured. 5*

Fucking the coach was hot but she ended her marriage after 19years at least she could have had a talk about his lack of interest in her . She just let her disappointment turn into adultery .

Not much of a story but it sure got me going. Thanks.

another story where the wife rationalizes that cheating is OK because somehow Mr. boring is not fulfilling enough. Of course she does not communicate this. She just expects him to know. So she cheats and enjoys it and expects to cheat again. And of the course the female author is not going to do the follow up story where Mr. Boring catches her and divorces her. Too bad, it would have interesting to hear her excuses.

Of course women never reject their husbands advances. What? They do. Often? Oh, then maybe men should cheat everytime a wife says no, Dear I have a headache.

I thought it was a good teasing build to a nice end. As for those comments about saving her marriage. These stories are fantasies.. so really??? Of course in REAL LIFE she should do that. Not as fantasy...

It was not a logic story, it was an erotic story! And I found it refreshingly original.

Because she is going to need be more than an assistant Cheering Coach to support herself when the husband of 19 years lets her go with absolutely nothing but her underware. And what will the kids say? Oh Boo Hoo, Bye mom, have a nice life, whats left of it.

Several of the commenters pointed out your skills and the holes/flaws in your story line, so I won't swell on that much.

Your character seems introspective enough. Perhaps a sequel could deal with the consequences of her seduction of the coach. Now that she's had her ashes hauled and the humor of off her will she feel remorse of wind of into greater sluthood. Given her out of control emotions and inability to convey them to hubby, sluthood looks to be the path she's on. Maybe Vicki will intuit something and spill the bean to the husband; accidently or on purpose.

Just your basic cheating whore.

Just another married cheating slut…

Trying to understand the mentality that allows some men to make heroines out of cheating sluts. Masochism?