by ValoryG
Thanks for the feedback. I thought the list might be a clever way to intro the scenario, and then not have to describe it in too much detail later, but I can see that didn't work ..............
That script list is just filler, you probably shouldn't have detailed so much of that crap into the story to the point it made the story annoying enough to not want to finish. It reminds me of the story that had the so called "dress code" in it. Filler is just that, filler. It's best to just summarize it and condense it to an acceptable level and stay on point with your story. I doubt many readers are going to appreciate "filler".