All Comments on 'The Sailing Trip'

So then what happened? Did the drug wear off? Did Lynn lock Kim in the brig? Did they sail off into the sunset? And why should I care? Make me want to care about Kim and Lynn, tell me about them as people. The rich gay divorcee and the naif student are cliches. But Lynn the person and Kim the person should be people.

Hello

Are you going to write a follow up?

In all honesty, I am torn about reading a sequel ... you did an amazing job on the build up and even to give the reader something to think about.

So well, done ... I will read a sequel if you write one. Just keep the level of excitement the same ... this one was awesome!

Thank you

Tim

Please write more, Please.

I'm sure, if this is any indication, you are a master at eating pussy. I'm a 42 year old mom and would love to be naked with you. So hot!

why does Lyn's name change from Stockman to Anderson? Bad editing, that's why.

The story is too short, ends too bluntly. doesn't have enough characters in it, I mean you have the opportunity to make this a great lesbian cruise, but it falls short. Sorry, I cant rate it.

It's great, I just wish you would write a sequal to it! :) Thanks for writing! XD

This was very interesting but I wish it was longer

Lynn is a little aggressive, I wish you would expand the story...

Enjoyed the story line and the description of the sex.

I wish Lynn would not have used the assistance of the drug and seduced her naturally. You have the story set up well for another chapter.... and perhaps a sequel. Good start.

Yes, when I was first seduced by a much older woman I was only 18. And now I am the older woman at the age of 46 making love to those who are much younger than myself. There is nothing like your first lesbian experience and your story brought back the memory. I came nearly instantaneously. Much too quickly but then it was the 2nd climax when the enjoyment of it all kicked in and I knew immediately that I had found my calling. Thank you darling.

It is a shame the writer does not want to go where her original compass was logically taking her. The bad character wants to take a straight woman by force or drug. She chooses a drug to take her UNWILLING partner. But then the writer is squeamish about dealing with the context she herself created and we end up with a completely sober shell of a heroine who is actually behaving like she just took a mild painkiller or just had a few drinks too many -and yet is so aware of what is going on but will not say no. In other words, the character is too sober to be drugged and also too dumb to catch on to her own being drugged.

With a few tweaks and a genuine commitment to the non-consent part and a continued story , not the plot-interruptus we got, this would be a worthwhile story , as the writer has no problem with ambience descriptions but the characterization was not there for the heroine, nor the self-awareness necessary and emotions as to what is really going on.

The Sailing Trip good stories need to continue on The Sailing Trip pt2 and beyond. Lynn and Kim get to know each other.