All Comments on 'The Savage King Pt. 01'

Wonderful first chapter!! I fuckin love these type of stories!!! I just see such potential in this one! CANT WAIT FOR THE NEXT CHAPTER!!

Please, please continue this story! I loved it!

I really enjoyed you story. I hope you continue it.

Perhaps you could linger longer on the climax of the savage handjob, his hard thrusts into her clenching hand, his hard chest pressed against hers, hearts beating wildly.

Loved it,

Sexy Redhead

Helpful hints. Proof read before enter. Had a few female when you meant male and first person when in second(?)..I/she . Other than that. Good job. Love how it could be stand alone or possibly more.

I would recommend putting the vocab list at the start of the story as opposed to the end

It's an okay start, the plot is intriguing, but you need more proofing or maybe ask someone to help you edit. Agree with the comment to add more detail/depth, but not only to the sex scene, to the characters physical appearance and emotional state, too. Keep it up!

Pleaseee continue this! Outlander gone naughty.

Holy hell yes please! I’d read so much more of this!