All Comments on 'The Scottish Festival'

What a wonderful way to add excitement and fun to a committed relationship! You are a wonderful describer of bodies and sex acts; you made Emma sexy and loving.

Finally I know what a man wears under a kilt: a cock ring.

If you had managed to switch from their direct narrative during the actual sex to a third person description instead, it would seem more natural. Having people narrating their own sexual performances during the height of it always stretches credibility. I'm not a grammar expert so I can only say it was readable enough for my consumption. The spelling looked okay as well.

As a quickie, there's not much else there to judge apart from saying, Good effort and keep on writing.

Thank you both for your comments. Anon, that's an interesting point. I will give it a try on a future story.

Nice and quick to the point.

Now i really want to play under a kilt.

umm would love to play under a kilt - going to Scotland and Ireland later in the year if it's open. Maybe I'll have the opportunity!