All Comments on 'The Sedan Stowaway'

... have been a reasonable story if only you had an inkling of how to write!

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But there isn't any payoff. I got confused by the different alternatives - assume the last one where he cancelled his appointments is the "real" one - and the rest were "what ifs" he thought about. But having her, when she's probably young enough to be his daughter, not cool. That's not the actions of a responsible parent. Neither are her actions to tempt him into sex.

That was funny. I liked you bringing in the different scenarios and the way they followed on each other abruptly. Quite nifty.