All Comments on 'The Sereotech Affair Pt. 01'

Question marks belong, appropriately enough, at the end of QUESTIONS, not STATEMENTS.

The following quotes from this chapter are NOT QUESTIONS:

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Being summoned to HQ could only been one thing?

we both know they are illegal, and so does most of the populace?

We've sent in several agents before you with no results?

Then there was the Beta Quadrant Affair, in which she did much the same thing with the rogue mothership?

Take it slow, case the joint down good?

She got used to the terminals, where the supplies were loaded, who were the VIPs and most importantly?

Suiting up in her agent gear, Adrianna used her laboratory keycard to get into the complex and made her way to her destination?

All she had found out from her two weeks here was that the Feds were right?

Her head was pounding and her body was numb?

It was all she could do to maintain her posture and stand erect?

It was one thing to design a droid that would fire a gun or make tea?

Her only trump card was the transceiver hidden in her body cavity?

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I would suggest that you find - and use the services of - a competent editor before submitting the next chapter.

-Rei

Story sux. See critique regarding ???

I'm stealing OCA, so it's good for one star.

Basically, a quirk of your writing style appears to have irritated a couple of people.

I'm not one of them, I enjoyed it, an interesting premise for a story.

Keep it going please.