All Comments on 'The Shepherd of Ashburn Court Pt. 04'

Another 5 * chapter.

Thank you for sharing your talent with us.

I love how the women are strong in their own right. They aren't helpless damsels. And the sex of course is scorching hot.

This is great stuff! You must write more!

11 pages & still wanting more....

kudoes force ending, 2 girls are gonna get a pasting

wait with excitmet so see

keep the work up LOVING IT TOTALLY

AMAZIMG STORY THAT YOU ARE WRITING. PLEASE KEEP IT GOING.

keep up the excellent work on this series. It's been a great read thru all 4 parts so far.

BurntRedstone I have added you to my favorite author list. Thank you for your wonderful story. It is nice to have your work grace Literotica.

Okay, it has been two weeks. It is time for another chapter NOW !!

Very much looking forward to the next chapter... there *is* a next chapter, isn't there? :)

...for poor old Big Ben. Having to suffer through the excruciating burden of stallion duty to a herd of mares in oestrus!

Just gotta feel sorry for the poor suffering fella?

Uhhh...Fuck No! May he be chained to a changing table, condemned to perpetual diaper duty!

Umm... You do realize it has been stated multiple times that Ben is sterile right??? A harem story may not be your thing, but do not criticize a submission to the site just because you forgot something clearly stated in the story. Or maybe you were too busy skipping the actual story to just get to the sex parts? If that is your reason, you are missing the good parts.

...satire |ˈsaˌtīr|

noun

the use of humor, irony or exaggeration as a means to express envy of the author BurntRedstone and his fictional character Ben Shepherd.

and I must be doing something wrong

the few women with whom I have been fortunate to have been intimate

do not pass out

and lose control of their muscles

as all of Ben's partners seem to.

; )

If there is one thing I have learned speaking a foreign language or posting on boards,

it is that irony is very dangerous and can cause a false message about you to be passed along. Nice irony Fanfare!

You mean counsellor.

Its all about money,.

It is unrealistic to think that all the women in Ben's life are multi-orgasmic and, besides having a very large penis, he is capable of going on and on until he has had three orgasms. For the average mortal, Masters and Johnson's study shows that there is a refractory phase after an orgasm. Nevertheless, as a male fantasy, this is a very well written and interesting story.

I had to agree with anonymous who said "Or maybe you were too busy skipping the actual story to just get to the sex parts? If that is your reason, you are missing the good parts."

As for the other anonymous "It is unrealistic to think that all the women in Ben's life are multi-orgasmic and, besides having a very large penis, he is capable of going on and on until he has had three orgasms.":

1) It's FICTION!" It doesn't have to be realistic.

2) These women are mostly older women, thus more likely to be multi-orgasmic with the right partner, and Ben is written as an unusually skilled and endowed lover.

3) As Ben has stated, his body thinks it's a teenager. I know that as a teenager, and in my twenties, I would stay hard even after the first orgasm, and had a short recovery time. BurntRedstone doesn't try to pretend that Ben is an ordinary man.

Anyway, the real beauty in the story is the story itself. I've even been tempted to skip the sex scenes to get on with the story, although so far I haven't done so, partly because BurntRedstone can throw the unexpected in anywhere, even in the middle of a sex scene.

With all the chapters to come, and at least one multi-chapter sequel, I'm just wondering how big Ben's harem will get. :-)

This is the second of your series that I am reading and I am enjoying this one as much as the previous despite the very different concepts. Very well done.

There is one small detail that has gotten dropped along the way. Tina was breastfeeding in chapter 2, I think it was. But there has been nothing more about it. It would have some noticeable impacts on her sex scenes. The clothes shopping trip would have to consider the temporary size of her breasts. Speaking of which, women don't buy bras in a boutique without being sized and trying them on. It is all a very minor point and does not distract from the story. I would probably remove the breast feeding entirely if you were to revise the story at some point. It is a small detail and I offer it only to help improve your future stories.

And I look forward to reading the rest of your stories and those yet to come.

Ben's multiple orgasms in quick succession are tedious and unrealistic and are ruining an otherwise good story.

This is a work of fiction, not CNN. In the land of Ashburn, big men can be multi-orgasmic. It's cute; it's funny- it's not real. Go get 'em, (fictional) Ben!

I personally can have multiple orgasms in a row without getting soft, and I’m a guy. The most I’ve ever done without stopping was seven. So... yeah, it’s not actually that unrealistic.

I wish i could go for 7 non stop, 4 is my limit, the difference between men and women being multi orgasmic is that women's are continuous while men's are one at a time over a space of time. The secret is simple, keep it at a good pace but don't over exert when coming close to cumming, as soon as you cum change positions into one that feels tighter, it'll keep you hard and not too sensitive.

As much as I want to like the idea of Ben being admired and attended to by all these different women, the harem angle is a bit hard to take. I made it to page 7 before it seemed like overload. I realize it's fiction, but still...just conflicting with reality.

Where I come from, a man can be married to up to four wives and also have concubines on the side. If the man is not a good husband and father there is a lot of jealousy and fighting among the wives and children.

(The saddest part of this kind of polygami is that unless the man/husband/father is very rich, the children have to help maintain the family from a very early age .... they are sent out on the streets as beggars or roadside peddlars sellling fruit or snacks. These children usually don’t go to school and the girls are married off even before they reach puberty.)

Ben sure “growls” a lot. Can you try a few other verbs?

At the opening, Big, Strong, Tough Ben....is now a Wimp.

And every element of the story becomes a succession

of set-ups for endless little sermonettes.,,none with dialog

having a hint of credibility.

This Chapter really turned downhill and fast. The only really good part of this segment was Ben taking Tina out shopping with Lori and Lisa. Their experience in the lingerie shop modeling for Ben (and for your Panty Fetishist Readers) was worth the price of admission. The rest of the chapter was entirely a negative. I hope the story can still recover. Thanx anyway.

I'm sorry... But it's just boring... I don't know when I've done as much skimming... There's just no "story"...

-jaye-

HOT!!!

Really enjoying this and realized you put it up on Amazon so I went and bought it there instead to continue! If the work stays this good I'll keep supoorting!!!

This really needed to be reviewed by an Editor....between the grammar issues and the usage of British English terms and slang in a supposedly American English setting, I found it hard to stay engaged with the story. Nobody in the U.S. says "I'm going to University" or "I'll pay at the cash" or uses the phrase "flaked out" in reference to falling asleep. Dressing Gowns are not a thing everyone uses or even has in the U.S. and for crying out loud, its "Counselor" not "Councillor".

Loving this series as usual, coming from the best Author her at Literotica, 7 BIG FAT BLAZING STARS!

really too impressive this Ben.

Between 2 blowjobs, you should ask him to find a cure for cancer, restore the ozone layer, solve the Israeli-Palestinian conflict.

I loved it,I apologize for the for the people that can't understand the "English terms" such a trivial thing to whine about.5 stars thank you

This is am immature adolescent fairy tale that has nothing to do with any facet of real life, essentially a long male ego stroke story that is not even interesting.

The sex scenes are bit much, and the logic used describe loving relationships involving multiple people I suppose is a possibility but maybe not more than a dream or phantasy but it was well thought out. This chapter had a little action with an overbearing boyfriend and he got what he deserved which helps ad to the story and obviously Ben's harem!

Out of all the chapters in Bens saga, this one is my favorite.

This was where it all started. His first times with Gabriella and Catherine were amazing and really cemented them as two of the three primary loves in his life. Ignoring them in favor of new relationships in later stories really soured me on the franchise, but this will always be when they were front and center. Simply wonderful.

The sex scenes were all amazing, with the healthy amount of oral sex I love to see splashed in. The blowjob threesome and the dressing room scene with the twins were some of the hottest writing i have ever read as well.

Yes this was obviously written by an older British man, given away by the terms and language being used, but that is really the only detractors from this installment. To 'arsenlupine66' who commented that this is a fairy tale...duh! This is not written to be plausible, it's written to be erotic, fantastical, and entertaining and succeeds on all fronts.

Overall, A+, 5 stars, Would Highly Recommend!

Dont know if this is only me or not but chapter four of shepherd of ashburn court was replaced with chapter four of shepherds crook

This somehow became The Shepherd’s Crook part four instead of The Shepherd of Ashburn Court part four.

@anon and @amanbaby123, not just you guys :/

All fixed now

Excellent installment(s), loved Ben's physical 'White Knight' to the rescue so much, ... his money to buy homes and clothes and school for his various women is wonderful, but busting ole Greg in the face was just awesome, thank you for sharing, ... ;-) TTFN

The love, intimacy and emotional aspects of the story are amazing and at times quite touching. The sex (and levels of sexual attraction/arousal by every woman who is blessed/fortunate enough to get near Ben), however, is so self-indulgent and ridiculous as to be obnoxious. Like it's written for a very insecure audience that needs their ego constantly stroked and rarely bothers to engage their brain. I don't know how anyone can suspend their disbelief and/or be aroused by the cloying sex. It's too much.

Too much sex detail to skip ovar after the third, fourth and fifth.

What a wonderful yet believable fantasy! The twenty-something that lives in my seventy-something body finds the whole scenario attractive....

Damn I love this story about Ben Sheppard and I'm very grateful that Burnt Red Stone is my favorite Author! Another 5 BIG ASS FUCKING HUGE FLAMING NOVA STARS! Thanks BRS you're the BEST!

... White Knight, Ben, .... buying stuff for his various ladies, homes, clothes, schooling and vacation trips to France are all just wonderful, .... I am assuming that Ben is still in his 30's (barely), but yeah, I get his worry over age with Tina and the twins, ... still, he is in great physical shape, so why not? Or has he entered his 40's? -- wasn't there a comment about his being twice Tina's age? ... anyway, it was a very enjoyable chapter, thank you for sharing, ... ;-) ttfn

why doesn't anyone talk during sex lol its like they are completely mute as soon as they get naked