All Comments on 'The Silver Guardian Bk. 01 Ch. 01'

I look forward to more. Kudos!

Much better than anything I could write couple of mistakes mostly missing words but otherwise a great read keep it up

Thank you both for your comments and support, I’m glad you enjoyed it! I have found an amazing editor who has agreed to help edit this series. Chapter 1 here is done being edited and I will submit it to replace this version here shortly. It flows better and I believe is a better read than it was before. Chapter 2 and 3 have been submitted and are awaiting approval. Again those are the “raw” versions that I have edited myself but as soon as I get the edited versions back I will submit them to replace what will be up on here.

Starting with Chapter 4 I will simply be waiting to publish the edited version and not resubmitting a polished version of it. All 34 chapters are written and completed and I am just waiting to post them as I get them back from my editor.

Thanks again!

DaddyIrishman

So far, the story build is a great start. Looking forward to the next installment.

Well done.

- DK

Thanks DK, glad you enjoyed it. Some of the chapters are a bit shorter like this one whereas some are certainly longer. I have this planned as a three book series and book one is mainly character and plot development. It does heat up with some action and plenty of erotica later on but it’s a journey that takes a bit to get going. Books 2 and 3 will be much more involved and plot heavy with plenty of action and twists. I will post more chapters as they are finished being edited by my amazing editor. For now the first three are submitted and awaiting approval to be published. I did submit the edited version of this chapter today and hopefullly within a few days it will replace what is posted here. Not to worry many more are coming.

- DaddyIrishman

I loved it and can’t wait for the next chapters!!!

Glad to hear you liked it and I have posted and awaiting approval on the edits of these two and should have Chapter 3 submitted in a day or two maybe. More to come :)

- DaddyIrishman

The version now published and posted is the edited version that my editor Tex beethoven cleaned up for me. Hope you all re-read it as it’s a much better version now :)

Just as a recommendation, might enjoy some stories by maxd01 and wolphin5 on wattpad.

I just got on Wattpad myself though so far no traffic on my stories.

That said Maxd01 is on Lit too and I have been reading their stories for years. Not familiar with the other author but I will take a look. Thanks and glad you like the story, check out the other chapters if you haven't already.

P.S. There is a short humorous narrative story I posted that you can find under my submission called "The.Worst.Blowjob.Ever." Its a 5-7min read and I think is quite hilarious so check it out ;)

- DaddyIrishman

... a good start. Dynamic, with enough detail to give a solid mental picture.

Writing tip: your sentences are usually quite long. To help avoid text walls and also keep your cadence natural, break some up. A short sentence packs emphasis. Use them when there's one detail you don't want the reader to forget, have a reaction stand out, or to start a sudden event.

I've read the whole story about a year ago and really love it you are a really good writer and would love to read either more of this series or another series hope you keep writing